by Rabbitrunner91
You know....Every story does not have to be a stright suck and fuck. This was a beautiful story and well written. Please continue the good work.
A great story of a troubled girl's transformation and her new lease on life. It proves that anyone can change their lives and reach their dreams.
Beautifull! A standing ovation! A story that melts the heart! Cinderella/prettygirl with some twists! loved the long lead up to my minds emotional gratification! How could it get any sweeter! Now I am going home to give my wife the longest hug and sweetest kiss! Thanks for putting life into perspective!
Thanks for writing!
Sexmate
I loved it was so warm and wonderful
i wish there was more stories like that one
keep writing more stories like that
This is a well written story by an author who has experienced love and knows how to detail it as best as can be put into words. You have a gift!
Once in a great while an ertic story brings tears. As a well-to-do male I find the tenderess and true sexiness of evolving love in this story to be superb. Bravo!
GREAT story of compassion and faith in a human being! Nice to see that experiences (sisters plight)have an impact on a person and the way he reacts to a person in need. Erotic and sensitive; well written :-).
Hope to see more from the Rabbitrunner
There are thousands of girls and young women out there in plights quite similar to Melanie's. I think there are also men out there with the capabilities and sensitivity of Jason. It is my extreme wish that more of the Jasons and the Melanies of the world do cross paths and bring the growth of self worth, self respect, accomplishment and ultimate re-direction that this story so marvelously illustrates. Rabbitrunner, you have a gift. Thanks for the nice piece of work.
Prof. Ramstein
I agree with all the other commenters. A beautiful, heart warming story. What a pleasant change from the bruality and rape that seem to be the norm lately. 60 year old George
Young Son:
If your profile is as advertised you have a great literary future ahead of you in what ever venue you choose to publish it in. You truly moved me.
A truly wonderful story. His wondering what might have happened to her when she said "Please help me" really touches your being. Such a difference her two life paths were.
Great story, Rabbit.
you met every element required of an excellent story. Your writing is, or should be, an example to young writers of how a good story is presented. Your writing was beyond reproach in the fact I found hardly an error and if there were any, they were insignificant and did not detract from the story. Thank you for your time and effort to write this story and most of all for sharing it.
I really really enjoyed this story! The character development was superb, the sex hot. It was easy to identify with the characters. [Gualterio]
Now THAT is a fantasy. The corporate dragons would never approve. Nor was there really any reason (these days) why a secretary or PA would need to travel with him for the purposes stated.
A Great Story. I think that this also tells the story of many young hookers out there. They are often in similar plights.
The basic story is good and sweet. There are several places where you switched tenses that were awkward. Also, the places where there was tension were kind of glossed over to get back to the happy bits as quickly as possible. It would be a better story if that tension was explored further (i.e. getting away from the pimp, her finally telling her back story, her calling her mom, etc.). Also, I would have liked to have seen more of his sister in the story; he's bound to have told her what was going on, and it would be nice to see that reaction, and possibly the two women meeting.
Enjoyed this. Think there needed to be some resolution with the pimp though.
And where else to read it but in Fantasyland otherwise known as Literotica. Thanks for a pause in the day to day routine of shelter in place. 4*
This really is a fairy tale. In the real world, someone with her history would have a lot more issues than just low self-esteem and would probably require extensive therapy.
Thank You ! To make a long story short, THANK YOU ! This, as with your other writings, proved to be a Great Escape from the challenges of life. As inferred but maybe not clearly stated in comments about your other stories, YOU HAVE NO PEERS !