by jeannie7
As rape is evil, let's hope you write a sequel in which she gets her revenge.
It's like reading a boring manual on how to be a BDSM slave. Seriously, fuck off to that category.
It appears that this is your first story submission. If so, you did a fine job and you should keep writing. One more thought.......I found the second paragraph shift into the third person to be a little confusing.
I've been reading literotica a while now; I became a fan in high school. I'm still quite young. I couldn't get the above scenario out of my mind so I decided to put it out there for others to read. I've never wrote a creative piece at my own will, so this is a first. The grammar and structure is terrible, you don't have to tell me twice; I will try better next time...
***Also....I guess rape is "evil" to some people. I guess I'm turned on by the idea of resistance or the idea that the body could overpower the mind in some cases. I would never want it to actually happen to myself or another person. I apologize if it offends anybody...but hey, I categorized it correctly to prevent offense...and the title is a dead giveaway. Thank you to those that enjoyed it. ***
i really loved it and i hope to read more, you did good for a first time writer heck even for a talented writer just keep writing :)
Really enjoyed your story. It did leave me wanting a second part so I hope you have some ideas about how to finish it. I hope you continue writing.
I loved your story, Very compelling to keep reading. Now, that said, where is part 2? Can't wait to read it.