All Comments on 'Jen and John's Greek Vacation Ch. 01'

That was a good start . Hope you do more and maybe make them a little longer.

Nicely done it could belonger please add to this Story.

Please don't let this hanged, recently many interesting stories left with just 1ch. Hope you continue this really nice tale.

The present tense narrative of this story looks like a stage or movie script. I do not know if you can switch the narrative (nondialogue) to past tense in future posts, but doing so would read better.

Thanks for all the feedback. I will write more as time allows and in third person.

but don't understand why they would fuck the next morning not night before when alone,& she had him showing her his cock or should of waited till they got to Greece