All Comments on 'Jen and Mike Ch. 21 Pt. 01'

for writing this story and ruining the characters. you could have written a great story about mother daughter incest without the cuckolding aspect. too bad you went and screwed up established characters written well by another author

i like this series. i have stopped paying attention to xleg's version because it is boring. i like that there is sex in this story and an actual focus on being a hot story and not a melodrama. there was of time paid in this story to scott having to be on his best behavior regarding mike, as a fan of the cuckold humiliation aspects, which you are very good at writing, i would suggest letting the guard down and just letting those things happen. ok, thank you for writing. i am a fan of this and really look forward to the next chapter

Listen maedhros21 your a top notch writer and just about everyone would agree but after this first part of the chapter I'm not sure where this can go. You have the daughter wishing she could take her mother away without hurting her father but that is almost literally impossible and the situation with Scott may end 1 of 2 ways. The 1st way is Scott gets out of line and the fun ends right there(highly unlikely but still a possibility) or the 2nd way is Jen reconsiders her marriage with Mike and they go there separate ways where Jen is happy and Mike is basically broken to the point where he would consider is there really any point as to what his life becomes. Now this is the way I see based on this past chapter and how it has played out, your the writer so you would know where things stand and where things go from this point.

Look forward to the next chapter that you said would be out soon. I am waiting to see how Mike enjoys the action on Skype and whether Jesse and Jen will feed his need to be cuckolded. Am not so keen on the Jasmine track, but the rest is superb. Will Mike be outed in front of Jasmine and Tara?

Hope the Vegas weekend will be the ultimate test for Mike.

If Mike has got a brown belt I want to see him kick Scotts ass

Given the venue your effort is a better fantasy than the original and avoids many of the voids X historically creates. Keep at it and do not be frustrated by the hackneyed comments of those who continue to ignore this is a fantasy, hardly a recounting of the world of reality.