All Comments on 'Jen's Christmas Nightmare'

WOW, I reached the bottom of page one and saw 13 more pages to go, I have just sat and read them all. I loved it and as follow on from your first story it is brilliant.

Thankyou. 5 Stars is nowhere enough.

Wow again Anonymous, what stamina to read it in one go! Thank you, I am aware this piece was rather rushed, I only started writing on 1 November without a clear plan and, other than 2 editing sessions around the 20th and a final edit overnight 23/24 November, it seemed to come together a little better than I dared hope. I'm glad at least one reader enjoyed it, many thanks.

Great story! I wish you had divided it up into 3 or 4 parts.

5

Hi Boyd, unfortunately, the rules of the competition are strictly complete stories, which is the reason I so painfully explained the back story so there was no need to read the original story in this "series". Delighted you enjoyed it, well done for getting through it!

I enjoyed that thoroughly, though my butt is getting sore sitting here reading! :-)

Just finished this story and thoroughly enjoyed it! The female protagonist was delightful and the rest of the characters were well written, too. There was a lot of background information and clever details included, but most of all of it turned out to be useful before the story was over. There was good foreshadowing about the identity of the infiltrator, but the questionable injury of a possible traitor was a nice misdirect to keep things in doubt. The best trick was in the title, leaving the reader expecting Jen’s nightmare to be that certain somebody rather than the careful setup along the way. There were a few typos scattered here and there, but nothing too distracting. Finally, did I mention that it was long? Yes, very long, but a fun read to make up for it.

Well done! 5*