All Comments on 'Jessica is So Shy'

Loved this, will read others that you have written for sure...

One of the best I've read. Very hot and not the usual incest story. But I could've done without the "bum hole" stuff. It was a slight turn off. I hope there's a second part to see where this all goes.

...but still very good!

but good. You wrote the innocent girl and older understanding man very well. There relationship played out nicely thru the whole story. You just did a great job. Will a chapter 2 follow?

Keep it up. I like your stuff - and I like bum holes too so keep at it.

This story was so touching and erotic. I stayed hard the whole time.

there needs to be another chapter!

Yes to another chapter

The author has painted a very vivid picture in my mind of the beautiful little shy girl.

The picture in my mind of a freckled fair skinned red headed beautiful little woman letting him have his way with her is really over the top for being erotic.

I would hope that the author would continue his beautiful story, letting the readers know that she has stayed with him and he has taught her what it is to be a woman that has a man that is totally in love with her and worships her.

The daddy influence makes the story kinky and erotic, and I would like to know the story behind Jessica's daddy fetish. There's a lot of story left untold and I hope to read the rest of the story. Thanks

I found that highly erotic... Great writing skills, I got a sense of D/s tendencies from the characters; subtle but highly charged... But that's just my opinion.... thanks for writing it

C,mon, AddieQ! There has to be a second part to this. Please? Pretty please???? It seems unfinished.

great store

You were right, I enjoyed this immensely, it turned me on on a whole new level, having two of my fetishes so well written in it. Great one.

Wow. ...all I can say is Wow! After reading two previous stories of yours and having just finished this one I can't believe how amazingly... damn I'm speechless... how deliciously and smoothly the story flowed, how beautiful it was, how improved your writing skills are over the other two I've read!! Great job! I actually want to post to craigslist or something to find a girl like this to live out a micro-fantasy! (misChievOus grin)

A few spellcheck misses and one or two structure slips (probably from editing booboos, been there) but otherwise Absolutely Perfect! More beautifully written stuff like this and I'm hooked!

You really had me all the way....keep writing...you good.!

Everything is "wet", "so wet", "unbelievably wet", "sopping", "slippery", "haunting", "beautiful", "hauntingly beautiful", "electrified" and "electric". The same descriptive words and phrases used over and over and over again, ad nauseam.

Please get yourself a thesaurus and use it. All of this repetition is not only boring, it is highly annoying, too.

What might have been a halfway decent story was ruined by it.

I'd also suggest you make use of Literotica's free editorial services. This is the second story I've read and the use of overly repetitious words and phrases is obviously a bad writing habit that a good editor can help you break.

Entrancing and sexy, great combination.

ONCE UPON A TIME, I HAD A LOVELY WOMAN AND SHE LOVED TO URINATE WHEN WE MADE LOVE. 'BARB' WAS TRULY WONDERFUL - YET WE DIVORCED AND SHE MARRIED ANOTHER MAN, WHO ONCE INFORMED ME, "I WANT TO THANK YOU FOR LETTING 'BARB' GO. HE WENT ON TO TELL ME WHEN SHE AND I MARRIED, IT WAS TERRIFIC. BY THE WAY, SHE PASSED AWAY." 'BARB' WAS IN HER 50'S AND IT WAS DIFFICULT TO HEAR SHE HAD LEFT THIS EARTH. SO THIS STORY HAD A LOT OF MEMORIES FOR ME AS BEING HER FIRST WAS WONDERFUL. NEED A FOLLOW UP TO THIS STORY.

But this one was ok because it WAS NOT incest.

Awsome

You ended it with so many unanswered questions. What’s Jess’ backstory? What happens next? What’s up with the mother? Where do they go from here? The story feels very incomplete.

One of my primal fantasies... sunset red hair, milky white skin, covered with freckles... innocent and willing... you read my mind.