by onthereb
Why the need to cheat? He was open to her have any man she wanted, so why did she cheated?They were a real pair of losers: "Judy had been married once before and I had been married and divorced 3 times"!!! Then came the exaggeration: "It had to be 13" long and bigger than my two wrist put together.". This is a bad story, worst written!!! 1*
You know it sucked, but at least you didn't waste as much time on it as I did.
So you were divorced three times by the age of 29. I was tempted to ask how you found three women to marry you until I read on and realised how unselective you are.
This story looks like you made no attempt to proofread it. It is just about unreadable as a result.
And now your divorced 4 times from a wife fuvking a spade on ur honeymoon... Pathetic
It's sad she has already let him know that he can't even satisfy her the first day. Also lacking reality a female isn't going to take a fence post in the back with spit. That would most likely rip her.
I fell asleep reading this. Please don't write a follow up to this, it was awful.
Is the honeymoon a good time to get some strange with complete strangers? Explains the multiple marriage habit doesn't it.
....this was broken, flat and wholly uninteresting.
Too many technical problems to cite here. Poor characterization, choppy....oh, it goes on and on.
Look, try reading your story out loud (to yourself) and listen to how the words sounds. If it doesn't flow like real conversation, you will have to work on it until it does.
Then go through 5-6 times reading for grammar and spelling and get all that fixed, then re-read for sound and smoothness. Then read for plot and characterization and fix that. Repeat until it's squeeky clean.
Otherwise, don't bother.
a judging by the 3cuckold lovers that liked it, your story really must suck
Maybe just 10 inches instead of 13 and one wrist width would have made it more realistic ;)
asshole comments dear annony! God you are so fucked up in your head. I gave this story a 5!!
Interesting group. Slut wife. Idiot husband. POS boyfriend. Glad they found each other and didn't inflict themselves on people better than them.