by sumbody777
It's a nice story line with a good build up. But .... both you and your editor missed some silly mistakes / typos / grammatical errors.
There are a few here that might condemn the whole story just over a couple of spelling mistakes. I'm not like that but I will say they did interrupt the flow of the piece.
Please take more care over your proof reading and don't put all your trust in the spelling checker!
Good first effort, looking forward to part 2.
Tom D
If you're going to criticize someone for their writing, it’s not a good idea to do so in a grammatical mess that is far worse than anything they posted.
You need need a new editor! There are several errors in the story that just interrupt the flow. You forgot to capitalize the pronoun "I" several times, wrote "minuet", instead of " minute", made Julie a "Mrs." instead of a "Ms." or "Miss", as well as a few other issues. Considering the male protagonist was an English teacher, it kind of made the silly errors stick out even more! I kept thinking Mr. Johnson (kind of an obvious choice for an erotic story; kind of a cliché, don't you think?) couldn't have been such a great teacher if you couldn't even capitalize the pronoun "I". Just something to think about..... Fire your editor!
I actually thought the story was nice. I guess my dumb self paid no attention to the mistakes. Job well done doe👍👍