All Comments on 'Julie's Gang Bang'

Enjoyed the story and imagery. Do wish you'd proofread better and fix a few typos. Two questions: 1) How come the bikers didn't do her ass (willing or not) too? 2) Isn't their pool table ruined for pool? You might want to put some cover on it before gang bangs lol. In addition, the office co-worker might parlay this into an on-going opportunity to nail her mmmm. Apropos, using this "you" reference for him is confusing. Why not just assign him a name?

English language was a bit better. One thing in particular hit me, "Mine if I put a little more cum in here?" Mine is a statement of ownership, implying something belongs to you. Mind on the other hand means do you have an objection to me doing something. You can see you spelled the wrong correctly as spell check would show, but in reality you used a word that only puts confusion on the sentence and on the scene that is unfolding. Distionaries are wonderful things, get one, a real one, and use it.

...but the writing is shite. Pick a tense, pick a point of view, and stay with it. Don't switch mid-story. Totally ruins my boner.

Man, you hit bottom on your first try. A wife who is gangbanged in a biker bar. You are beyond sick.

. . . Ass-to-mouth! Drops this down to zero stars.

"Accept" is not the same as "except". Learn the difference,

Sorry you don’t appreciate the ATM fantasy part of my story, accept for that and my less than correct use of words, did the story give you a brief sexual fantasy thrill? I am not an English major or professional writer I wrote this story and others for fun and to get a safe vicarious sexual thrill. Suspend reality, put your English teacher red pencil away and enjoy the fantasy. If your not stoking your cock or perhaps rubbing your clit your just not reading these stories rights. Oops! Correctly🤛

Appears she's looking to catch something she'll regret. Pretty nasty