All Comments on 'July 4th, My Sister, the Lake Ch. 01'

Liked the story and I am glad you are doing more chapters . You keep writing and I'll keep reading ...

Liked it but why add the dad to a brother-sister story?

I'll never forget the years in college my younger sister and I spent together back in the early 70s. I was home for spring break from UF and everyone else was gone for the day - went upstairs to use the bathroom and opened the door just as Diane was getting out of the shower - she didn't even try to cover up - took one look at those beautifully full sloping tits with those big, fat suckable nipples that hardened with my stare - my average. 6 inch cock tented my shorts and she couldn't help but stare back. Both of us just stood there afraid to move until I finally took matters in hand so to speak - grabbed her hair and pulled her head back so I could nibble and suck on her throat - could almost hear her get wet from that - while my hands pinched those long dark pink nipples. She was moaning and started to work her right index finger over her very hairy pussy - she was dripping by that point. I sucked her nipples for a few minutes then we looked each other right in the eyes and started to kiss deeply with plenty of tongue - we were not holding back at all. A few minutes later I was so hard and wound up I simply pushed my shorts down , turned her around, coaxed her right leg up onto the side of the tub and as if we had been old, accomplished lovers, she bent forward, reached her slender fingers between her spread thighs and gently grabbed my shaft and began rubbing my angry purple head up and down her slit. She turned her head to look at me and at the same time backed up slightly to set my cock into her pussy - she left the rest to me - that was understood. - she wanted me to take charge, and I did - gently but firmly I slid my shaft up inside her in one stroke, stopping only when my balls hit her ass. I held still for a few seconds just to enjoy how tight and hot her pussy was but couldn't hold out . I grabbed her rather narrow hips and started to pound her while she began to voice her approval by moaning and using very distinct language all designed to send me over the edge.I lasted maybe 5 minutes and she knew when I was going to spurt - once again she reached between us and began to gently scratch my sac and almost whispering that it was OK to shoot my load as deep as I could get it, which I did very shortly thereafter. Fortunately, after that encounter, things were never awkward between us - we carried on from that point as two longtime lovers and had the best sex of our lives from that point on. To answer the obvious question of when it ended - never did. We both got married, raised families and eventually saw our kids leave to go out on their own - we never let that interfere with "us" - we met whenever we could wherever we could and the sex is still as good as it ever was - in fact, I'm the only man that has ever been inside her ass - her husband had been after that for years and finally gave up - thus is something that we have saved for ourselves - and no I've never had my cock up my wife's ass - always told her it was too dirty.

thought the story was really great until introing Amelia

Loved the story and the details of their lovemaking. Bella seems very interested in her sexy older brother, and knows just how to go about getting what she wants. If he's seven years older, he's already 25. Give Sam some chest hair on that amazing and masculine chest for Bella to trace her fingers through or to lick with her tongue. I'm anxious to see the story continue now that Bella has whetted her appetite.

if you just finished university 4 years and she is 7 years your junior she would be a freshman in high school or you were left back 3 times

Loved it. Please continue it. But please keep Bella and her brother exclusive to each other. Under no circumstances get them involved with any other people. It always ruins the story when writers do that.

Good story... Watch the seven year age difference. She's 18.... That would make him 25.... Other than that... I'm looking forward to reading a lot more from you.

The narrative establishes that the character "struggled through" school. You're free to let your imagination fill in those blanks when an author decides not to waste time on something as tangential to the story as the logistics behind a character graduating at 25. Unless you're dumb, and your imagination can only conclude that someone seven years the junior of a new college graduate must be 15, in which case you should have the person reading the story to you explain how you're in error.

I was reluctant to start a series. I'm a bigger fan of stand-alone stories. However, when I saw the "Ch. 01" I at least knew I was in at the beginning. You have developed two interesting and likable characters in Sam and Bella. The peripheral characters are intriguing as well. The setting is terrific, and I very much like your pacing and dialogue as well. And now, as the first chapter closes, you've introduced the potential source of conflict. I'm anxious to see how the plot will develop and the conflict resolved. I'm hooked!

Love it. Have fantasised about my sister as long as I can remember. While screwing some girlfriends I have even imagined they are my younger sis'

Well done. Hot.

Mark.

.... another well written story. I'll look forward to the next chapter.

Looking forward to the next one, hope it will be soon

I won't belabor the age issue that has already been pointed out by others. Other than that, the story really has everything it needs. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

There are plenty of scenarios where a person could be 25-years-old at college graduation.

I, myself, worked for four years before attending college and was a 21-year-old freshman and graduated at 25.

I knew several fellow older students who had done stints in the military before college.

Plus, not everyone attending college is a full-time student. Whether from academic struggles (as mentioned in this story), or a need to work their way through college, a full course load each semester is not always possible.

Heck, even being a full-time student does not always guarantee one will graduate in 4 years. I knew lots of fellow students who started school either with me, or before me, who didn't graduate until sometime after I did.

So, even though it's not specifically spelled out in the story, it is entirely within the realm of possibility for a 25-year-old to just be graduating from college.

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I like the story so far and look forward to the next installment.

Being that Sam will be working in San Francisco, and Bella will be attending Stanford, which is about 35 minutes from San Fran, I can easily see this story continuing for a long time beyond this 4th of July weekend. Perhaps they could even share an apartment at some time. It could be near Stanford, with Sam commuting to San Fran each day.

Wonderful read! I'll be reading the next chapter soon!

Love the story so far! Its very well written and Iv noticed that you've dodged a lot of cliche phrases and written things rather eloquently :)

Man, i love that little sister! If i could have a sweet sister....

Looking forward to reading the next chapter!

Thanks for writing :)

I am a70 plus year old man. Started having sex when I was seven with two neighbor girls in California. We moved from Oklahoma when I was in second grade. In their pussy and ass. (They had older brothers) I just did what they wanted. Back in Oklahoma in fifth grade on April first on way to school(1 to 8th) I saw some of the older boys walking away from school. I went on to school. (It was 3 room school) after we settled in our teacher cane in and ask if we knew where the other kids were? We said no and he said no one else had better stay put then he left the room. We got up and went out the back door. There was around 20 houses in the community. Our house was 1 mile south of 1/4 west. We wandered around most of the day and we ran in to the other group they were older. They called me aside and they had 4 girl panties off they bent over put their hand on this log and I fucked them all it was time for school to be over we go back to school.

Now for the g spot when I hear that I think it some stupid guy but your name is Mary right.

The other myth was that oriental women pussy ran cross wise and the wider you spread their legs the tighter their pussy got.

Sorry for the mistakes I am on a window phone.

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you write so well that it all seems natural and believable. I like it ! Scotty

One of my favorite stories. Convincing. Good loving relationship. Erotic.

Totally awesome! looking forward to more of your work. This is hot stuff!

Ted

5 stars. can hardly wait to read the next chapter!

To Anonymous, who tells stories and questions the G-spot: I'll say this, your dementia is producing more entertaining delusions than my in-laws'.

Excellent story, glad there's more to read! 5 *

Second time reading this. I probably read it about a year ago. I gave it a 5/5 back then but it appears that I didn't comment about anything. That's unusual for me to do that, especially since I enjoyed reading it so much the first time through that I saved it to my favorites list.

I still have the opinion that it's a top notch story, but Sam isn't thinking about anything emotional towards Bella who is obviously smitten. I find that to be disappointing. He's like, "oh! My sister wants to have sex with me! That's odd, but I'm down for that!" Not really the worst attitude, but I feel like he's still taking advantage of her.

I am totally enjoying the uniqueness of the nerd sibling being the sexual aggressor.

Like situations in the real world. All that IQ rebels at being the deprived introvert. Instead she acquired a female friend with the acknowdeged ability to wow the opposite sex, and by exchanging some of her time and knowledge in the form of help with a computer assignment, got educated on looking her best and getting us dumb ass males eating out of her hand, or whatever else she prefers.

Excellent work!

I cannot resist. Listen you dust bowl refugee, if you ever took the time to make sure the woman had as much of more fun as you, youmight have looked for the g-spot! It really is Not hard to locate. The first time I found one, I pushed a bit too hard and she almost pee'd right then & there. That's your first and only hint...it is right below the bladder. Now go get a Grey's anatomy and read!

This is certainly going onto my favorites list...Bella is HOT, and a red-head...my personal weakness!!

"Amelia"...uuuhhhmmm...NOT INTERESTED...just from the initial description, her 'entitlement' is palpable; she is obviously used to being the center of the group she is in, and others pander to this (dad/brother/everyone included). *As an aside...¿is she gonna be part of the sister-play? Hhhmmm??!!*

Five**5**Stars, well-deserved, and given with a sense of wonder, for the next chapters!!