All Comments on 'Just a Friendly Trick & Treat'

"Closing the door, he moved to the driver's side and entered the car. Starting the motor, he checked traffic and pulled from the parking spot."

Come on - this padding - far too much detail. Why not tell us what colour his buttons are, and what he had for breakfast?

"I had lived off of, well, Dad had more debt than assists, "

lived off / assets

No I won't support you on Amazon.

I am quite sure there are more mistakes in the story than those you have pointed out. Since it was written for here and published here first, there has been no edit performed on this story. Should it be put up for sale, those errors, and others, will be fixed.

I haven't asked you, or anyone else, to support me on Amazon. It's merely a link should someone wish to buy any of my work. I appreciate your opinion but will lose no sleep over it.

Have a wonderful day.

Liked it!

Interesting but a little to rough for my tastes. I suppose for some people quite appealing.