All Comments on 'Just Desserts'

just very flat. no dynamism. she sounds like she's got no soul/life to her.

plus, why would she sleep with them when they weren't that good anyway?? and why would that be part of the plan?

sort of has 2 stories going on at once, would've been better to write them separately or work on the reasoning behind her moves better.

all that distracted me so much I couldn't concentrate on the sex!

It started out fine, but then it roller coaster all over the place. Did you write this at one time? It read like you stopped, then came back to it but with a different plot. Then you stopped again and came back with yet another idea.

This story line was way too inconsistant to be acceptable or enjoyable. Not a good effort at all. anon jerry

they got fired for doing what she was also doing?