All Comments on 'Just Get It Over With'

As I was reading your story I realized I recognized the style. This one and native sister are both great

When can we expect more?

Great development...reminds me of a similar past experience with an Aunt.

Sibcest isn't really my thing (though I have absolutely nothing against it!), but even I thought this was really, really hot! Can't wait for Chapter 2!

hear hear! not here here!

Really well written and hot story!

Really good piece, nice crescendo and development.

Hope for a good second chapter

...bring on the rest of this hot story plus the romance... waiting impatiently here... lol...it is so good and you are one great writer of erotica

That was a very arousing story that kept me hard from beginning to end and I can't wait for chapter 2 !

Why did you not post the entire story in one go? Now I have to wait for the next chapter of this great story.

Keep writing please.

Don't stop please , this story sounds so real you could cut it with a knife.

Excellent story. Glad you are going to continue. Can't wait for future chapters.

Please continue this story SOON, he needs to fuck her tits in the next chapter !

OH MY GOD!!!! By pity , made fucking this sister as crazy ally and that it bathes in the Cum important to his brother to the monster of cock. Made the baisez in several ways possible, it must be that she swallows also his cum to almost vomit to quantity, made the kiss long and hard with romance... excellent

It should say that it is its fucking for its huge prick and that it provides a titty-fuck wonderful . extended on his back with his ass posed on the thighs of his sister kneeling, She fucks his cock long and thick with its melons and it draws its language for the impact

right below mine, has to be the greatest review I have ever read.

I hope that you continue. 5*****. Jane

That was very hot.I want to hear her thoughts when he sticks that flagpole into her tiny drenched cunt. Oh yeah.

He has a chiseled chest...imagine when he removes his shirt and she sees the beginnings of chest hair growing there, across the pecs and perhaps in a treasure trail -- she'll be even more excited! She may have seen Greg shirtless many times, but this is sex, and she can grow in her excitement when she sees her MATURE brother bare his manly chest to her! Bring on Round Two!

Fuckin hot as hell, please don't make us wait to long for part 2.

Gave you 3*s. I encourage you to keep writing. Maybe try something else, non-erotic or whatever.

I apologize to AddToWater after reading 2 pages and 2 paragraphs of this story.

I fell asleep👵💤😗.

The protagonist mentioned about the baseball bat in her brother's underwear, then lights out for me.

I'm sure this is not a reflection of the story.

I'll get back to it in the future.

Thank you for your effort AddToWater.

AMerryman

At least, excellent story ,really deserves a sequel as soon as possible

I'm hoping there is more than a little help in cleaning each other, and obligatory shower sex. But I love that she instigates it all.

I came hard reading this but I need chapter 2 real bad. Please have him sodomise his sister.

I couldn't finish. I rate on writing ability and this is amateur. It isn't bad amateur and it isn't good amateur. There is a 'write and done' feel to it. I can see this as a first draft with spelling corrections, but I find the effort to create a tightly worded story lacking.

Had me rock hard the entire time.

5 Stars

Looking forward to the next chapter

I really enjoy stories like this that have a good build up instead of diving right into full on sex. Can't wait for chapter 2

I just loved this story.

Made me think back to when I was a dancer at a strip bar and one night I saw my younger brother in the crowd. I had my bra pulled down and had been pulling my skimpy panties to the side to give the guy in front of me a real good look (and hoping for a bigger tip) when I realized my brother was there and had a perfect view of everything. I rubbed out a good one that night thinking about what my brother may be doing back in his bedroom at our parents house.

Please keep writing,

Tracie

I don't know what's with the anonymous fucktards, but they really need to STFU. I only wish they would have to balls to join Lit and give us the ability to call them out for their ridiculously inappropriat comments. Their judgments are terrible.

At any rate, this one is another great one from a great author.

I'm anonymous, I liked the story, but the anonymous you railed at has a point. You only like it, but with no objective eye, you can't help the writer improve.

a combination that has been fatal since time began, TK U MLJ LV NV

Loved it

The plot is quite beleivable which is hard to do for the first time incest. Rady to read the next chapter.

Constructive criticism is one thing, but saying that AdToWater is not even a good amateur is not constructive. Has this person ever read "Native Sister"? I have been know to be very critical of stories for years. Stories that are boilerplate rewrites of dozens or even hundreds of previous stories. Stories that truly show the writer has no business writing so much as a grocery list. I have been both thanked and rebuked by some of those writers. I understand constructive criticism.

Very detailed! Enjoyed the build up immensely, i think maybe adding to the marrative from Greg's perspective could be helpful.

Yes, a very well written story! So incredibly arousing and Yes we want and need more chapters soon, please. Your plot and descriptive writing had us hanging on every word or phrase. It made me feel like I was in the room at close range watching this whole scene unfold. Very powerful. Hopefully, Stephanie will press him into the shower wall and rub her pussy against his cock and kiss him so softly and make him hard, so she can grab his huge thick cock and slowly heft his heavy big balls in her hands. Of course, he'll have to respond and rub her pussy slowly and kiss her softly back. I hope she tells him she wants him and she devises a plan so they can screw each other slowly and make out, etc. That starts a hunger they will take years to satisfy! His sister is very smart in keeping secrets and they will enjoy their hot love. Thank you so much.

Looking forward to the next chapter, soon I hope.

Great story but slow down with chapter 2 as 5his one had a few mistakes were you mentioned he but said her...lol

Great story. The pacing and build up really makes this story work.

Sequel please

You did a great job setting up the story and then building the excitement until the climax. Great story. Can't wait to read more.

Awesome story. I can't wait for more!

Loved the tone and style of this story. i hope this is just one of many chapters in this series..it's that good. Can't wait for the next part!!!

First of all, I loved this story (and I really have a thing about shorter than average women, which added to my appreciation)! I see that you've written other, longer stories, so I hope you'll excuse me if I comment in ignorance, but I don't know if/when I might have the chance to read them.

Opinion follows: If this was meant to be a short story, all is well and good. I actually don't need or request a next chapter. For me, as for many people I'm sure, it's the buildup of emotions and sexual tension leading up to the bonding through a shared sexual experience that is the real turn-on. Since you ended with her inviting him to shower with the intention of having sex, although you surely would do a great job of writing the scene(s) that follow, they would simply be "more sex" at this point. Stories that have sex going on morning, noon, and night get boring very quickly. If you haven't seen it yet, Google "dad daughter slow seduction". Minus the very end of that film, it's very arousing. All it needs is the culminating sex act at the end.

I would like to suggest that you develop a story of a sister seducing a very reluctant brother. Perhaps she starts off by sneaking in his room at night and pulling his shorts down. Gradually building up the courage to take his manhood into her mouth, all the while nervous that he might wake up. Maybe one night he's so deep in sleep that she sucks him dry and swallows his cum, and he doesn't wake up. You know... make it longer and more drawn out before culminating in sex. If you should write a father/daughter piece, please make sure it's the daughter seducing the father and not the other way around. Most fathers who find themselves attracted to their daughters are paranoid about abusing their authority over their daughter to put her "on the spot", and also worried it might have a negative psychological consequence.

Now get your arse into gear and start on the next chapter..⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

great story, great depth

Great premise, nice flow (no pun intended regarding him) and kind of funny regarding her initial idea.

Clearly, what she neglected to take into consideration was that that couple from the show, even if there was an attraction, probably thought, "There's no WAY I'm going to be nuts enough to fuck him/her ON camera in front of who knows how many people so I might as well just ignore her/him." Especially since even though that couple would be together for a week it was really just the equivalent of a one-night stand WITHOUT the sex..

Her brother would NEVER consider his time with her as a one-night stand, whether there was sex or not. His time with her is his whole life.

next chapter plz

Gotta have more!

You definitely wrote a very good story. Great depth and detail.. I love how much the brother reapected his sisters wishes even after their mutual masturbation.

Now when do you plan to continue the story...I'm anxious to see what happens next.

Definitely want more now.

That was absolutely smoking hot!! Hell, *I* didn't stop stroking the whole time! Heh. The only thing that is killing me is that I don't see a part two :,(

Thanks for the great half story!! Looking forward to the next chapter!! :)

This was a great story and I enjoyed the scenario. Thanks for writing it!

Just amazing, thank you!

This is such an excellent story. I would love to see what happens next.

Great story, I hope another chapter is coming!

Very well written. Great thoughts & dialog. You have serious writing skills. Would love to hear what happens the rest of the weekend. Thanks for an exciting, fun story! A-5 easily.

The ending of this story was satisfying, and that's a rare thing. You build up enough anticipation around the actual event of mutual masturbation that the curtain call before the shower didn't feel disappointing or premature at all. I got the sense that you could have continued on with this story, but chose not to because the tension was gone - and that was a good choice. Well done.

While it is sad that you didn't follow up with 'to be continued', this was a very satisfying story in and of itself. You've got serious skills, and portrayed the situation both convincingly and enticingly.

Thanks for sharing your talent and imagination!

Jason

Really hot story and very well written. Waiting for the next chapter in the story.

I rate 10/10 I hope there's a next chapter

One of the best constructed and written and I've been around here for a while. Very realistic and well paced. Hope sincerely that there is more.

I can't wait for part 2.

Part Two!!! My god this was so hot! Another great story!

Been more than a year. Hope there will be follow up. Story was a good read.

I really enjoyed this story. I hope you do a chapter 2.

I was wondering when the part 2 will come out, read it like 6 months ago, still come here twice a month to see if part 2 has been released.

Amazingly hot.

Mr. ATW,

I just reread this story after some time. It’s credible and spontaneous fun — just enough build up. Looking at your other submissions and the span of time between installments gives me hope that you’ll eventually add to this arc and “Massage Therapy” as well. Keep up the great work.

Thanks,

A Fan

Please continue this story😭

This was fantastic but you need to continue this story!

Great read! Very hot! Definitely need to do a part 2!! Thanks for sharing

Brilliant ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ So now your bound to do chapter 2 or else..

Great start, now on to part 2!

Nice

I loved the first half of this story, and how you slowly built it up. It mad the ending that much sweeter, and can't wait to read part two

AWESOME. I am still STIFF

World’s best Sister!

Can’t wait for the next chapter.

Ah, men are so shallow and dirty minded-

women too! ;-)

Very nice!

Nice premise.

Good back story.

Needed more dialog during the joint masturbating session.

Needed each asking the other to demonstrate how they masturbated. How often? What do you think about when you're masturbating? Do you ever masturbate thinking about me? How often? What do you imagine happening? Do you watch porn while masturbating? What kind?

Four stars.

It was realy good not romantic but sex story. Thank you. I wasn't sure whether to give it a 4 or a 5. But the last lines convinced me to give it a five.

O M G !

I literally stopped breathing a few times as these two enjoyed the situation they had developed.

What a great story !

And to stop it with her question, oh damn I wanted to be in the story.

I did notice a few places where words seemed to be missing or out of place.

A good slow editing and proofreading would make this writers work much better.

Enjoyed that quite a bit. Nice build up, slow and sexy.

Wow. Surreal, but I loved it. More…

“…the second volley of thick white cum spattered almost perfectly right up the valley between her breasts, instantly making what appeared to be a small white creek between her mounds.”

WHEN I READ THAT I THOUGHT “WHAT A GREAT AND UNIQUE METAPHOR.” MANY AUTHORS CALL THE BREASTS OF A WOMAN WITH BIG ONES “MOUNDS” OR EVEN “MOUNTAINS.” I’VE NEVER SEEN THE COMPARISON OF SEMEN ON THE BREASTS TO A CREEK IN THE VALLEY!

OVERALL A VERY AROUSING STORY. I’LL HEAD RIGHT TO THE PROMISED SHOWER SCENE!

This was great.

OMG, I just couldn't help myself as I orgasm with them.

Good premise.

But sex/masturbation is so rushed.

No real nervousness.

No extended dialog about how much he liked her breasts.

Were her nipples hard?

Had he ever seen breasts this nice? What would he like to do to/with them?

Does she like them kissed? Sucked on? Played with? Has she ever titty fucked?

Has he ever jerked off in front of a girl before?

Four stars.