All Comments on 'Just One of Those Things'

What is with all the cutesy symbols in the story? Bre@st, pu$$y? This reminds me of Jr High School, not something an adult would do. If you thought you were being clever or cute, this is not the place. For me it was extremely distracting.

Trash, and that is being kind

For a first effort... can't say it was good, but there is promise for this writer. Keep trying. Use an editor. Drop the "cute" symbols. I would expect at least a 50 on your next effort.

Thanks for your comments, they will be taken on board with my next story... I thought I would try to put my personality into the words by using symbols obviously a wrong choice.. next time they wont be there and the next one is all fantasy and not written from a real life situation... I hope you enjoy the next one :).. Ur comments are apprieciated they make my next one written from a completely different angle...xx

what is it with some people just cos its not some big butch ugly dyke bendin the skinny gorgous modle over the boot of her car n takin her from behind like a bitch with a strap-on or or whips n spankin by the nasty school teacher who needs to teach her naughty pupil a lesson doesnt mean its trash if you dont like it the simple answer is oh well thats 10 mins of my life i wont get back il not read that again everybody likes different things another persons trash is another persons treasure as they say, if you dont like it write your own with the stuff you like n stop puttin others down theres no need for it.

"She" and "her" are not proper nouns. Quit capitalizing them. Others have already covered the annoying symbols. The kicker is that extra effort was applied to make this story unreadable.