All Comments on 'Justice'

As soon as oshaw indicated that "Randi" touched this story, I knew her agenda would stain the undertones of the original arc. Oshaw, before you associated with that "crowd" your stories were uniquely flavored. They may not have been always and completely liked, but at least they stood on their own. This story is lost some of that as soon as I began seeing parts of her "work" on here. Tsk tsk.

There were many errors in it as well, so I'm not exactly sure what she meant to edit.

A fantastic story. Life can be messy and complicated. We all have to grow up and see things through different lenses. As demonstrated in this story communication is vital. Misunderstandings are going to happen. Maturity comes by seeking council from those you trust and then making an informed decision. Mike got his world rocked, and i would dare say that it would take most people a little while to wrap their head around something like that. Kudos to the author for having her quit after their date. That showed her desire for better things. I would like to think that Mike would have got there even without dads intervention as it took place B4 :) they proceeded into their relationship. Love is not always easy but is always necessary. .

Crazy story; but, wow , the fun and sexy ending. Well written. Thank you.

👍👍👍💯💯💯😉😁🤷🍕🍕🍺🍺🙋🙋🤷🤷justvcurious why u stoped posting here . Good storys. Hope yall r alright,. Any way thks.. and happy " retirment 🤷🤷🍺🍺🍕🍕🙋🙋🙋👍

What a shallow little boy. Good story though.

The mom and dad's story was great, could have been the whole story.

Mike was far too immature to have been allowed to get married.

I've read all but one of osha's works, enjoyed most, this is the best. Just my opinion, of course.

Incredible story., I loved it. 😉

This is Story telling at its best..5stars.. this is the 4th story you have penned that I have read. Anxious to check out your other ones...JZK

All I can say is the can write a great story. I have read a few of his/ her works and they well worth my time. They all managed to draw a tear to my eye. At least 5 stars

Superb story-telling. Excellent plot.

5 stars.

I can appreciate his despair, I think he was somewhat immature in how he reacted. So he was forced to grow up and look at things honestly. The confusion about Fitzgeralds is understandable. In this instance, the ignorance was definitely to his benefit. Hers too, if I’m honest. - This is a wonderful story of redemption, and true love. A very easy 5/5

MC Mike is bit of if a prig and lucky that Lila is so forgiving.

A lot of thought in this. Too good for just a 4, so I bumped it up.

Great story. It clearly states the MC and Lila were lovers after she moved in with him. Thought the story within a story was top notch. Nice twist with the names of Mary and Dawn for Kate and Mary. MC was overly melodramatic regarding Lila and Fitzgeralds. It it in the past. He has no proof that she did anything beyond dancing and stripping. Get a grip. So what if she went out with a couple of the rich patrons. He had girlfriends before Lila. Move on in love. Lila clearly adores him. Of course not entirely sure why give how he reacted the night of their wedding. Yikes. As always 5 blazing stars with this author.

I was as intrigued as the Anon who posed this query:

"I have to admit I got lost a bit. You gave the impression that they had their first time together during their wedding night. And then Lila is pregnant. So, who dunnit?"

So I went researching into the story. Found this nugget of info:

"From the second date, we moved to our third and then our fourth and so on until we were basically shacking up together at my place. I finally convinced her to drop her lease and move in with me as a money saving proposition. We instantly adapted into our newly found status as roommates, best friends, and lovers.

I took her home to meet my parents during Christmas and they fell in love with her..."

Makes sense, if any?

Great story Thanks for your writing. Really enjoyed it.

He doesn't know that his fiancée is a stripper? Due diligence?

Love the story within a story. Well worth 5 stars. Yes Tom was being an idiot. Glad he grew up and was able to make the right decision. As always with this author well written and entertaining. BardnotBard

Hermano, esto es talento

Gracias por compartirlo en una plataforma gratuita

Excellent story in a story. Great creativity. I love reading the negative comments too. What a bunch of neanderthals.

R

Cookie

6 pages just to find out the whole family are wimps.

What's this got to do with Loving Wives?

Stories a 5 but the hero is a dufus from the word go. That he would pick his woman with the requirement that they be snow white while he is used goods strikes me as just a tad two-faced. I reckon his dad is a far better man than he!

I gave this a 5. This is really a 10*************

DazzyD

The MC is as dumbbas a boxnof rocks.

The premise that he does not know his fiancee is a stripper is just dumb.

This is one damn fine story

You spin a great tale!

On page 5 you got Lila and Dawn mixed up. Writing is really good, story kind of mediocre with lots of holes. But thanks for the effort.

Story is dumb as shit.

Too many holes in the plot to enjoy the story. A recurring theme with this author which indicates an unwillingness to do even perfunctory research. That's plain lazy.

To any who wonder if the author is still out there, he is.

The two comments I had left from prior stories that were not glowing recommendations but instead pointed out flaws in plot were deleted.

Mut be the author's form of justice.

That speaks more to me than anything the author could write.

Loved the story but why is it on LW category?

I have to admit I got lost a bit. You gave the impression that they had their first time together during their wedding night. And then Lila is pregnant. So, who dunnit?

Wow!! 5 HUGE STARS!! Loved this story. Excellent

Good story although Mike is kind of a wuss. Turned down multiple times then uses a favor type scenario to ask her out again, and when she says no AGAIN he makes her feel guilty about it? Mike is that creepy guy that never takes no for an answer. It worked out here because it's a story, irl not so much

You've done it again. A truly touching story that brought tes

That was a great story! Thank-you! So enjoyable!

Poor Mike missed the grow-up pill, got his degree, and was still a sophomore. Weak dick.

If she was a stripper without him knowing it while they were dating, I could see his issue. However, shaming her for being a stripper BEFORE they were boyfriend/girlfriend is ridiculous. What a tool and what a dumb premise to base a story on.

The skill of this writer made it a 5. Even though I, too, wondered why, given what he already knew of her sad background, why having been a stripper would be such a big deal. Still, QuickMagazine suspended disbelief, as is the QM wont, and was suitably moved. Interesting also to note that in the intro, oshaw noted a hiatus (it HAD been almost two years between "I" and "J"). There's been a 4-year hiatus since "Kept" (which I'll read next). Is it too much to hope for that these 4 years are another hiatus, and not a retirement? (or worse)

I couldn't finish this story. Why is your main character so hung up on the fact that his wife was a stripper for the literal first week of their relationship. The dude is a cu

One of the best writers on Lit, no doubt

If you are not convinced by reading oshaw's stories that he is a hell of a writer, the comment section should make you a believer. People, it is fiction!

For Christ's sake she was a stripper, who cares. The dude has issues

Now that is how you tell a story. The backstory inside the rest of the story just made it so real and so interesting. Loved it.

Wow what a twist. The flashback got so interesting that I forgot about the actual present story. Lol. Great story. Thanks for writing.

What a Bard. Frustrating forward, then a harrowing thriller. A romantic conclusion (don't judge a book by its cover?) Cool.

The twist saved this story; otherwise the whole thing would have hinged on Mike who's a holier-than-thou hypocrite. Thank god for the dad's backstory, which was quite gripping. 5

One of the best!!

Great story, one of the best.

I almost didn't finish reading this story. The "dickhead," Mike, needed his bride to take him by the balls and march him to a judge and have the marriage annulled. The weasel dickhead couldn't and can't be trusted to be a father. She is better off raising her kid by herself.

A real story.Really good

Brilliant story

Really liked it

better than excellent. awesome story

He's an idiot, bonafide card carrying idiot. She stopped as soon as she started dating him, she was a stripper/dancer, he's an uptight a-hole. 3/5

another tear jerker I plan on looking for alot more of your stories 5 star

Brilliant and moving.

5 stars

Mike is clearly an outstanding candidate for the sanctimonious, hypocritical dick of the year. Great little story, though.

LA

Awesome!

5+++.... Stars!

Man this guy can spin a yarn...the usual with Oshaw...tears and joy....5 stars

You see, son, your mother was a whore, and I’m a cuck. Didn’t you realize that we raised you to expect the same thing for yourself?

ZK

The cliche about girls putting themselves through collage by stripping but being good and faithful girls at heart always makes me chuckle a bit.

The willingness to bare your tits to strangers instead of buckling down and spending a 10 hour shift on your Saturday and Sunday behind the counter of your nearest fast food restaurant speaks volumes to character and morals of said girls. Besides, anybody really worth receiving a collage education should be able to get good grades while holding down at least a part time job. If you can't then you simply aren't college material. Full stop.

I think you are becoming one of my favorite authors. I never saw that coming. Great Story. I read Grief and enjoyed it, then Interest and liked that one, but this one was awesome. Thank You. I think I will read all of them now.

Lovely story, Oshaw! Enjoyed it immensely !

Great story, but Mike is an idiot and a piece of shit.

Another good story from you, I hope at some point you return to writing here

Mike was a shit. Really hard to empathize with him. Also, really immature reaction as she did tell him gar before hand.

AWESOME!!!! This was a tear jerker to beat all tearjerkers. I loved it. My wife thought I was crazy. Then she read it. She still thinks I'm crazy, but the Empress of Manticore approves. 10 stars, before it deserves it. Change the rating system. The Bear heartily approves. Viet Nam Vets make great heroes. A man's got to do what a man's got to do.-John Wayne

The BEAR

Love is a life sentence. Sex is an accepted pass time among consenting adults. Exotic dancing is a legal profession that pays well. Men, (and some woman), enjoy or get titilated watching young beautiful woman dance, so? Would a gal watching male hunks dance have the same attitude? As some have voiced in their remarks. People are people some of us have questionable morals and others condemn them or any on they deem that don't 'measure' up to their standards. Did you here the one about this guy was looking for the perfect girl? After years he finally found her, problem was she was looking for the perfect guy! Good story

Long intricate story but the right ending.fsr as I am concerend.

Worked with guy that talked about his wife and how much he respected her.

He also talked about the woman/girls he screwed before he married he. He explained you keep nice girls nice without mentioning the girls he had sex with. Bit of a double standard wouldn't you say! Men want sex, woman want sex, but men want a pure woman, give a break. I married a 19 year old with a 2 year old, she had more experience with sex than I had at 24. Like I said give me a break men want a virgin, but they want sex any time?...................................

Thought you had a good premise, but the story was too predicable.

Mike is completely justified in his reaction. Any man worth his salt wouldn't marry a woman from the sex entertainmeny industry. Only betas, cucks and no confidence losers would marry a Lila without seriously second guessing them.

It was tough getting past the first page.

Excellent tale. Loved the reference to "The Solution to Hodge's Conjecture". Links your stories together. Hope you are still writing?

What an arsehole Mike is.Pity Lila was pregnant otherwise she should have thrown him out.

That was a really great story with a twist that I worked. Nothing too over the top, just great characters that you could really pull for. Amazing work.

Almost like a Rod Serling ending. What a great unexpected story!!

Amazing story. The husband is an idiot however.

Enough said. Bravos. Wish there were more from this writer.

Mike annoyed the crap out of me. I kinda wanted to reach into the screen and slap the shit outta him more than once..

A good story, though far too long in the telling.

She was a stripper, was honest about it and told him.

What was his problem with that???

I would have had more trouble with her bitch attitude.

All well and good.

Basic message was that loose morals are good for everyone.

Not all strippers are prostitutes, but would you believe Lila? How did she get pregnant if she was abstaining before marriage???

The basic story was good, but all the parental back stories left me uninterested and disbelieving.

Mike was too self-righteous an asshole. He knew Lila's background, and here was a person with no family and no money trying to survive and advance, while Mile benefited from family that paid for everything. Who is the hero here? If I was Lila, I would have dropped Mike, because he was not deserving of her.

What a fantastic piece of quality literature! Brilliantly written story that wasn't predictable and the plot twist was totally believable. It's a captivating and romantic read that teaches you that people can recover their lives despite past mistakes! True Love can overcome bad decisions and terrible acts if the two parties have good hearts and strong back bones!!!

You are one of the very best authors I've ever read.Your storiesare original and some made an old man get dust in his eyes.Really really magnificent

that i stopped reading half way through the first page. He is a real dumbass fuckhead.

Thanks for the read.

Eom

His family are the real hero's in this story. He is disgusting !!!

assssnomunus comment, you seem to get peoples names cornfused. LOVE slap hapy papy #9

His head out of his ass, it happened before they got together and stopped immediately after the first date. It isn't a bar, it's BAR as in Browning Automatic Rifle, problems being heavy with a slow rate of fire in modern (?) warfare, but it didn't jam. Bob Seger is from Detroit, Michigan, concert tickets there seem to sellout in 0 time. My all time favorite has always been "Old Time Rock and Roll", but that wouldn't have worked nearly as well as "...Main Street" in this gem. Signed: BTW

The MARINES did NOT have a weapon called a bar in Vietnam. We had automatic weapons in the squad that were M-14's converted to automatic. Also there was a weapons platoon consisting of three squads, consisting of 18 men- 13- M-60s and 5 rocket launchers. At least it was this way in 65 and 66 when I was there in the MARINES!!!

I enjoyed this quite a bit. Mike was a turd of the highest order, but the rest of the family was great. Nice seeing both of the gang guys get taken down. And the twist at the end with the father was well done.

Five stars

She told him and then quit

Not her fault he misunderstood

He threw hissy fit

Leave him alone with his tantrums

Family great sorry they had such a son

... except Mike. From the start with the rich douche who tried to buy their place I thought Mike was an asshole. He improved a little bit when he first met Lila and helped her out with her car and the class she was trying to pass but went back to his asshole roots later. By the end of the story I hadn't really changed my impression of him.

Every other person in his family was great. The story of his parents was very touching and it was nice that they followed their hearts and found love together. Honestly, Lila deserved much better than the behavior she got from Mike. While I understood his hesitation to marry someone who used to be an exotic dancer, the way he reacted when he found out was cowardly and selfish. Such a shame he couldn't be the man his father was.

Many of us have had "other lives" and they are part of what makes us who we are.

Really enjoyed it, especially the revelation in the end! - But PLEASE,Oshaw, don't use words you do not know the meaning of. You have used :-- Reprehensible instead of Repulsive -- Acclimated instead of Proclaimed -- Restrain instead of Refrain and lots of others in your other stories( emasculated child instead of emaciated child etc.)

Get an editor.

Original plot ! and great twist when revealing Dawn is really his mother!

I can comply thought that the story teller's point of view is a little wimpy... I don't know how to word it but being shaken by news untils the rugs appears to be pulled from under you is one thing... Going out to think and recenter yourself is more than alright, but complain that much ? Hum... Fearing what is entourage think or will do to him ? Hisch... Not so mature and well enough in his own skin. Make it fear to disapoint your mother because you respect and love her so much... Not cringe a the thought of a swat behind the head from his pop.

And even if a lot of the flashbacks added up solid foundation to better accede the story, it is a lot of fillings not so relevant some times, if at all... the one about Vietnam doesn't do very much here? Again about the whole recap about Dawn telling where she worked. And I think there must be a better way to tell how he got under her defenses. The dad could have cut is story in two resuming just the first half before he met Dawn to 2 small paragraphs... Would have helped keeping rythm steady in the main story.

Hey but i'm done with the suggestion points. I gave 5 stars and I would give that again. It's too easy being a critic without having experienced critic on the receiving end. The reading was still worth those 5 stars. And it is bookmaked!

Keep the good work !