All Comments on 'Karma'

I must be a romantic. This is a very good love story. Well done.

I like your romance stories much more than the others. I do agree with one of the other readers that you don't need to use foul language during the sex. It is the one thing I dislike about all the stories on this site and don't understand why everyone thinks they have to use it. You mentioned you were a little apprehensive about writing this kind of story but I assure you that you are a wonderful writer and shouldn't feel that way.

Being an older male with a few unanticipated major life struggles in recent years i was very touched as I - oddly- found myself relating to Karma’s being displaced.

Having said that, I agree with another comment; the characters became thinner when the delectable primal urges that built so exquisitely started leaning towards a cheap script for a porno flick. You write so much better than that: the awe and lust of your characters was so well developed that I felt disappointed when the tone changed and it felt mechanical or obligatory. You could have the same scene and storyline and be even more erotic by letting the erotic develop in the readers mind instead of forcing it on them with culturally vulgar words. “Show, don’t tell”

There is magic in your writing. Don’t lose it to an obligatory plot or anything else “formatted.”

Poor young gal and wealth older widow pulled together for perfect ending!

Louisiana Cajun Guy!

I absolutely loved this story. Please write more with these characters. ♡

Great story, and no, Karma's not a bitch! She is lovely.

Just want to mention, the saying is "What goes around comes around," meaning that what good deeds "go out" from you will come back to you one day. It doesn't work the other way around.

I love your stories but I have the same concern I had in your other story. Why do two people who are innocent or professional or just really good people, just when coming together have to show their feelings for each other with such poor language. They are in love and making love but the language makes it sound like they are in a sleazy motel just doing each other. Your stories are great but lose some of their appeal when you have to describe their feelings using what I call "street language". Please keep writing

That was very well done, I enjoyed it a lot.

Two really good stories I couldn’t stop reading by you. Fantastic work! Kind of love story that jives with what a lot of people have to live, and in the end, the kind of companionship and love they hope to find. Great work. 5-star.

That was fucking fantastic

So well written, actually a very nice story instead of the usual f**k as soon as they meet garbage. Thank you for taking the time to write it

Truly well written and fantastic tale you have composed. Romantic, witty, and thoughtful. Possibly one of the best stories on here to me. Makes me desire to find my own “Karma!” Thank you!

Thank you for a great story. Please keep writing. Just read this one today. Will probably read it every now and then for a great romantic pick me up with a happy ending. So much in life does not have a happy ending that I enjoy stories that do have that . Gives us all hope when life throws us a SNAFU.

This was a wonderful story, full of heart, warmth, reality, struggle and lot of good coming to those that deserve it. True karma indeed :) (Plus, it got me worked up at the end, lol)

This I would love to see made into a film, its the best story ive read on here,

Not many stories I have read have this level of hardship, stress, worry and grief balanced with friendship, romance, affection and Love. The sex is only the dessert and had the finest of cherry's on top. Thanks for reminding us that the turtle may be slow but always gets to the end happily. Cheers from the snowbank.

LC68 - This was the second long story of yours I've read and I think you've changed my taste in reading. While your descriptive sex scenes are really well written and filled with emotion, the process of getting there was exquisite. Instead of reading for the sex, I was reading for the whole story. Truly more enjoyable. Thanks and please continue writing.

some things, Love doesn't have a calendar and there is a whole group of younger ladies out there that like older men

I really enjoyed the story. I have reservations about that kind of age difference but following Karma's difficulties and what she went thru it brings me to considering how short life can be that you have to embrace the good.

And I do like to think that Karma is in play in life. Nice touch!

Thanks for the wonderful heartwarming romance.

Thank you. Rarely are these stories believable. The characterization is good, the story sufficiently deep and involving. I'm off to see if there is a sequel. I liked the message as well.

Enjoyed this one very much.

Very well written. Good characters and nicely done intimacy. I chose that word deliberately. Seems to me to describe what you wrote better than simply 'sex'.

The only thing that would have been icing on the cake would be if that shitbag landlord got his?

Maybe a scenario for a or two? This story still has legs to it. I also think that it belongs under "Romance".

I loved how you stayed focused on the main characters and added a few others as the perfect seasoning. Thank you for giving us the full background on Karma and Joe. It made the story very personal and loving. I really liked how you ended the story. It was a perfect place with a perfect setup. It is clear, at least to me, that they will make this a permanent relationship and will deal with the fallout easily because it doesn't make any difference to them. He won't be the first man to have a wife younger than his own daughter. What daughter who has been raised by a father like Joe would not welcome that her father is happy. You left me with happy tears and a warm heart for such wonderful characters. The story is a perfect real-life definition of karma. This story is on par with "That What Friends Are For" but a more mature plot. You are very good at this. Thank you for your time and sharing your talent.

A fun read, I felt like I was with the characters

I wish I could find a girl like Karma,

greetings from Brazil

Marcello

Thank you for you, and the gift you give, the stories are believable, graphic, but you illustrate the difference between sex and making love.

North

Dear LC68, Nice love story with good, believable and endearing characters. Thank you for the effort which I truly enjoyed. Going to check out your other work for more rainy afternoon entertainment. jntiques

Dear LC68, i belive for your soul, mine and others...this kind of story are the best. Yeah, you're a very good writer...but, if other kind of story is like sex, this kind is like making LOVE...Please keep up the good work as you always did, my dear. G.M.

I enjoyed both this and Home Is Where the Heart is. The build up for both was very well done. Would love to see more like this from you LC68.

TBC

This is the second story of yours I've read and I really enjoyed both of them. Love your character development and the narration just seems to disappear. I really felt invested in Karma and Joe. A really good story and a very entertaining read. Thanks for sharing, now I have to go read the rest of your work. Just excellent!

JJ1

Great story , great writing. I love a good story where at the end, I feel very good and I'm NOT pissed off. Thank you

GREAT story and,now lovecraft 68 has 4 of the top ten stories I've read at literotica!

loved how it unfolded and he eventually won her over....

This is one of your best stories, good character development, nice romance.

The way the story developed fantastic

I have been reading them in alphabetical order and this is the one that affected me the most. Wiping tears of joy from the corners of my eyes. Great story! Thank you!

This is high among the best stories ever to come out of this site. The characters, storyline and action are believable and quickly draw you in. You could make a living with this talent Lovecraft68.

Reading about Karma (who started the story as Carmen) turned me right on!!!

I liked the way you built the characters and introduced them to us like old friends. Nice job!

I think that was one of my favorites. I was so sweet and tragic in so many ways.

A nice piece, though as is often the case it would be nice to see a more complete ending/epilogue, as I've notice with some of the author's other stories they end a bit abruptly.

Many stories like this are written in the now, so to speak, for me to find it fully satisfying narratively, I need to read what comes after, how will they manage going public about their feelings, (or for instance, as seen in incest stories, or other cases where the pairing is inappropriate, how will they keep it hidden and still have a happily ever after),

how will other people react to it? Such as Joe's daughter, will they get married? Will she get pregnant since they didn't use protection, and how would Joe feel about becoming a father again?

It is only after such things are tied up, or at least remarked upon that a story feels complete to me.

A little rough around the edges, but this one gave me feelings in a way I wouldn't have expected. I loved Joe and Karma and found their romance and the characters we met as we followed it intriguing. I've had my own Karma a time or two, but have never been able to make the connection like Joe finally did. Maybe that's why this story really touches my heart. Thank you for a little light and a happy ending.

Das war eine schoene geschichte, ich hoffe es wird noch mehr geben

So well done from beginning to end! Thank you!

Thanks. I really loved the story and the slow burn really paid off in the end. Probably the best I've read here.

I really connected with Joe and the relationship he had with his wife. It's how I feel about mine and can't imagine how I would cope should anything happen to her. Looking forward to reading some of your others now.

And like you, I also believe that good things really do happen to good people.

You gave an old man a bit of "hope"?

yes, and a good read too

Who cares about spelling and grammar and punctuation it's all about the story. It was great and so was where the hart is. Keep up the good work and I hope to see more like them.

No complaint about the plot line, though it took a long while to reach the payoff. However, you need an editor and proofreader to fix your punctuation, urgently. Spellcheck is NOT proofreading.

I really enjoyed your story. I guess I am an old softie. Keep up the good work.

Excellent! Very well written story. One of the best I have read on here. Keep up the good work and I will now go read some of your other stories

I read "home is where the heart is" and then had the luck to read this one next. Great stories. Thanks for allowing me the opportunity to enjoy these stories. I hope you have more of these. Thank you.

I think this is possibly the best story I have ever read on here (although you badly need a good copy editor!!). The build up and background was very vivid and your description of Karma made her very real to the point where I could easily visualise her. Her thoughts and actions were totally believable as were Joe's. This was an excellent read. Thank you.

I really enjoyed this.

Two broken souls

healing each other.

I was taught as a young boy to always follow the Golden Rule. Your story illustrated how that can make everyone happy. A GREAT READ!!

Been reading some of your other stories in the Mature/May/December genre and it was refreshing and, as I found, equally as kinky to have the shoe on the other foot agewise. It didn't feel creepy in the least (ala Hugh Hefner, thank god). I think the age gap was perfect and Karma was an old soul who had more than her fair share of hard times. The story built at a great pace and never felt rushed. The dinner scene was key, and so was the rush of courage she felt when she saw her body in the mirror. Very realistic. Karma's progression to womanhood was excellent and the sex scene was to say the least, scorching!! 5/5 barely does it justice.

Thanks for the great read.

Really appreciated and enjoyed this story. Came at a bad time in my own life and helped me on my way. Thanks for this, really needed the boost.

In these days of instant self-centered hook ups, it is satisfying to transport one's self back into a level of respect and courtship. ...and... Good Karma. :-)

Story got me warmed up!

Very straight to the point love story age is just a number

Greeeeeat as Tony the tiger would say.TWO People lost for different reasons find each other but both were afraid to admit they had feelings for each other. Karma had to make the first move because she knew that Joe would not or could not.I really enjoyed the story and would like to read more about them if you decide to write more about them.

Ron

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This is one amazing Story!!! Loved it so much that can't even say what exactly I love abt it... Because I loved everything about it... Want to read more!!

I'm ready for some good karma and hope it's as beautiful as this story's is! Thank you

Good plot and character development resulting in a believable and entertaing story.

good story, from one of my favorite authors

Nice story telling. A few sentence structure issues, but forgivable. I enjoyed it very much. The softer, more emotional side made it a more interesting read. Thabk you for that element.

I am pretty sure I will be reading all your stories after reading this one. Good job!

Really top drawer!

SO glad you listened to readers asking for another along the lines of 'Home is...', which I read several yrs ago and also loved.

Lovable characters, great dialogue, great pace, and very hot ending---love women who know what they want and get it.

thank you for producing and posting this lovely heartwarming story. you created two beautiful characters, Karma and Joe, and i could not avoid becoming emotional about them. the mark of true creative writing

Kept me zoned in from the start and of course very romantic too

First time I have felt the need to comment on what a great story it was and to say thank you for sharing.

I am typing this at 0215(A.M.).I usually read these stories for the erotica. I must say that you are truly an AUTHOR! I wanted to know what the characters were about, and you took me there. Not just sex between the characters.l have just finished reading a well written STORY. THANK YOU!!

Your ready to be published. I read a lot of books and have found a very good author on this web site, you. Warmth and caring went into this story. Your right. There's a big difference between sex and making love. You have just made Love. Thanks

a great romantic short story

This was my first visit to Literotica in a couple of years. Am just lucky to have found your story. Truly enjoyed it! Well done! Incidentally, I am an 80 year-old so appreciate the young/old relationship in the story. Many thanks.

I've read numerous stories on Literotica, but this is the first time that, upon finishing, I've said "now THAT was a piece of literature!"

Very nicely done. Good character development, an engaging plot and I couldn't be sure of the ending until the last couple of pages.

I like stores with a happy ending, good "afterglow."

I've read hundreds is stories on Literotica! I just finished reading "Home is where the heart is" and now "Karma" and they both rank at the top of stories read! At first not even realizing they were by the same author! Two really good reads! Thanks!!!

Pure perfection.

Karma..... brought me close to tears.

I can relate with the story.

So also can a whole lot of young women out there and middle aged men.

Thank you...

If this is you writing OUTSIDE your comfort zone, it's truly incredible. Even good authors within "their" genre would have a hard time matching the story-telling ability you put into this. My only complaint is that I'm done reading it, no more pages, waaaa! :)

Oh, and it's also terrifically complete. As much as I wanted it to keep going, you wrapped it all up in a bow. There is absolutely no need for a sequel, as nice as that no doubt would be to read as well. Some stories have left me wanting more, but this one has a completely "finished" feel to it.

Thank you so much.

I have read several of your stories and enjoyed them all. Karma was absolutely beautiful. Keep up the good work.

This was a great story and gives this old man a glimmer of hope. Just maybe I'll wait another day before thinking again of killing myself. Just maybe Karma will find me and restore my hope. I'm not classy, not handsome, not wealthy, not even healthy, but I'll give it one more day. Find me Karma ( and please don't call the police and tell them I'm suicidal. I've been down that road).

I'm NOT a fan of older guy and a young thing, but this was good. 5*'s easy. I shouldn't feel that way since I want a younger gal and I'm older, but I know to keep up with a younger gal who loves loving would be hard at my age. I don't like what age has done, but that's reality. Daddy/Daughter is a BIG turn off to me and I NEVER read them EVER! Hey I'm a perv like everyone else just can't do that. Everything else is ok and I love this author.

I didn't expect to read something that is well-written and heartwarming in an erotica site. Am a voracious reader and never a literary snob. But it is a fact that generally, people who troop to erotica sites are not really looking for literary jewels. So this piece came as a surprise for me.

I stumbled on this site a few days ago when I was feeling pretty horny and pining for a lover who is half a world away coupled with sadly finding out that my favorite old site is nowhere to be found now. I don't masturbate and never had the interest to learn how. But he was trying to encourage me to learn it because we're far from each other and reading gets me more excited than pictures and or videos. Instead, I found something that firmly supported my belief that sex is nothing without the heart. I won't settle for a stop-gap, I would wait for my lover.

Thank you for this piece.

This story deserve an ending appropriate to its content. A very well written story; deserving a "happy for ever after" ending for Karma and Joe and the children that would be fortunate having parents like them.

great story but needed to finish the story

What can I say that hasn't been said , another great story, though I would have like to have heard the comments from the regulars where Karma worked if they had walked in arm in arm especially from that slut Maria, that would have been a classic. Plus I to think that ( Home is were your heart is ) was slightly better but only just. Well done , 5 stars again

I never saw it ending like it did but knew that with the name of the story that something good would happen, just did not think she would end up with Joe. Keep it up, you have got a fan in me.

Cajun in Louisiana,

Thanks (again) for sharing this piece. Well written in terms of characterisation and plot. The conversation part was good too, although their time in the fancy restaurant sounded a bit like report (when Karma asks Joe about his unwillingness to date).

On a more critical note (and out of context), it pales a wee bit as compared to "Home is Where the heart is". I don't know why, but that one still remains the better one for me. The emotions were raw out there.Anyway, that doesn't mean this one isn't a good read by any means. 5* for your effort.

Bard.

loved it. fantastic story that is what i am looking for an emotional link. it seems no one has time to get to know each other also shows you should give people a chance.

Read this story long time ago...voted "5" then and will vote "5" again!!! Means a bunch to me for a couple of reasons. Was with a young high school senior lover when I was 42, out of the house and divorcing. It was very good for both of us.

I'm now in my 70s...widowed from a wonderful second marriage for a decade and have three young female friends who will have to remain friends I'm sure...but oh my do I wish not. Women my age are JUST NOT interesting at all.

Loved your story. Really like nearly all of your works.

Friendship then love then sex that's a relationship that will last. I do hope as others have said that you find a way to extend the story. Not having a creative bone in my body, I realize that may be easier said than done. Thank you for a wonderful story

Fantastic story, would love to see more chapters of these two! ;)

Excellent characterizations, good descriptions, vivid supporting characters (the landlord, the diner owner, the lady on the bench, etc), and a plot that moved along well. Oh yes, and a happy ending. I'm always a sucker for those.

Keep on writing please, and thanks for this one!

I loved it!!! I love the build up but I think it needs a little more. I love your writing and I think that it would be fabulous if you wrote a little bit more to the ending. What happens to Joe and Karma is never really resolved and I think it should be. Other than that, I think it's great. Keep up the good work!

I loved it!!!

They are fantastic. The building up of romance then.......

Five stars and favorite author

I love the development of your story, how you build up the relationship between the characters etc. I know its the end but I wish there is another story, a continuation perhaps of this one. I want to read Joe and Karma's story now that they are on a relationship.

Sorry for the bad english.

The way you wrote this story at first I thought it was going to be a big disappointment, but I kept reading and it was not very long until I was hooked on it so to say. The story had everything in it, humor, at the dinner, class, as in Joe, and of course the old fat disgusting Hal, but it did not have sex. Instead it had two people making loving because they were in love with each other. That in itself was better than just slam ,bam thank you maam sex. The love making meant something to both of them.

The story tugged at my heart a few times, but it was well written, had a good story line, was easy to follow, and most of all made sense. Thanks for writing and I do hope to see more of your writing here. Have a Merry Christmas and safe and wonderful New Year. Thanks again for the story. Jim

Thank you for writing this story, I absolutely enjoyed how the young lady allowed the gent to help her in her time of need. And the steamy finale was so well written as well.

Yaak!!!yack!!!! Yack!!!!

Such a beautiful story - it made my cry a little, made me smile and touched my heart as well as my... lower bits.

So much more than I expected from a story I randomly clicked on for a quick read.

Thank you! x