All Comments on 'Karma'

Great character development and plot. Best story I have read on the net!

A terrific tale to savor and enjoy...thanks!

This was a wonderful story. A story of love, not just sex.

Thanks for an enjoyable story that made me care about the characters. Nice pacing and well written!

Loved the character development. A well crafted story that can still progress as the lovers understand more about each other. Look forward to reading more off your work.

You made your fiction characters seem like real people we can care about, the toughest thing a writer must do.

Karma was GREAT! As you mentioned, it took a while to "get to the fun stuff", but the wait was well worth it! HOT HOT HOT!

I would love to see more!

REALLY ENJOYED THE STORY THINK THAT THEY BOTH NEEDED SOMEONE AND IT DOES NOT HURT IF THEY LOVE EACH OTHER 5 STARS PLUS

I DO HOPE THAT YOU HAVE A FOLLOW UP STORY ON THE COUPLE. IF NOT MAYBE YOU WILL WRITE ONE. A GREAT READ BUT WOULD LIKE TO READ MORE ABOUT THEM

RON

It was well worth the number of pages and the time to tell the story. I know the category is mature because of the spring September aspect but it is really a romance. It was very tight with out being hurried. I hope you have some more with the same quality. Now ro look.

great writing, but you could have shortened it! I mean 7 pages!?!?! WTF

what an amazing story. could not stop reading it.

Great writing, strong dialogue , compelling story.

This is an excellent story, well thought out and presented. It brought tears to my eyes with the wonderful feelings that it brought out.

Thanks for sharing this very enjoyable read.

Frankly, this type of story doesn't come often to this site. You write well, and this was on incredible story. I think I knew where it was going to end up, and you certainly did a wonderful job of bringing it all to a close. Thank you!

Great story

LC68, you really are one of the best writers on this site and this lovely story justs proves it!

Great story! 1 of the more important things in life - what goes around comes around. Thanks for putting into words much better than I could have. ;)

and these two are good people. I am happy for them.

lovely story.

I thoroughly enjoyed Karma, from her self-reliance to her eventual change of, or I should say recognition of, heart. Joe was skillful in his tenderness and true in his emotional range. You are a gifted writer and extremely good at conveying both sides of a delicate dance. Thank you so very much.

To give it a 5. I'm almost living the story except for not as much age difference.

I really enjoyed this story. I have to agree with another comment left for you, it is the best story I have read on this site. I hope that in the future you are able to write more about Joe and Karma...... Excellent Story

Funny thing happened while reading this story. I didn't know anything was not correct in spelling until reading a comment. I usually get really irritated at such things. That is the mark of an outstanding author.

Length was what it took to get the story accomplished. It was not rushed nor did it drag. If you had made it shorter to satisfy some readers you would have done the story a disservice. It was perfect.

This is a page turner. When you broke the story after the Hal encounter, I was left with the question of what happened. The way you answered was perfect.

The underlying moral of the story was excellent.

Your talent is commendable. I hope karma comes back to you, the author. You deserve it.

Thanks for a true love story

fantastic story line really enjoyed reading it

Really liked this story!! I've realized something about you LC, you are extreme. Your work is either really wonderful or extraordinarily abysmal. But you did hit this one over the fence. Not that the eventual outcome wasn't fairly predictable - he obviously preferred her and would eventually fall for her. But their individual stories were interesting, which is not always the case in erotica. But you do need to work on your spelling and using the correct form of words. Thank you, I was entertained as well as aroused.

Really enjoyed the story! Keep it up!

I really had fun reading this story! I even found myself laughing along with the characters and at their "witty banter", as I refer to it. This story was really well written and a great story all around. I enjoyed going along with the characters and felt really connected to their back stories, despite not having a similar one to either of them.

There are two things, however, that have bothered me since I started reading your stories: 1) There seem to be a significant number of missing, misplaced or unnecessary commas throughout your stories. I'm totally sure that could be remedied with a little proof-reading from a second set of eyes though, so no worries. 2) The use of the words "to" and "too" have been used backwards in few instances. Such as "You are to sweet" and "You are going too the store". Just a little more editing things, so again, no worries! Just maybe want to borrow another pair of eyes.

Love your work!!

While reading the first few pages I kept thinking, "god damn get to the sex already" the story was very corny but the sex was great

Damn, this was a damn good read in general! Even without the sex scene, well written and engaging story. Bravo!

I absolutely love the way this was written! Full characters who could be felt as real people, with real emotions. This is not smut, this is a well written, deep storyline, and you handled it beautifully. I love finding gems like this, and the gentleness contained in the storytelling was absolutely perfect. Thank you for posting this, this was a refreshing and wonderful read, great job! And although I'd love to see more of these two, you also did what many authors struggle with; you successfully gave the story closure at the end. Perfectly written!

I loved this story, so full of hope and the joy a second love can bring. Sometimes I just like to read a "feel good" story once in a while. 5 from me for a job well done.

This is what I've been looking for, and so rarely find on here. You have crafted a beautiful story with a great understanding of your subjects. I really identified with Joe, as a man who has lost his wife and tries to come to terms with life alone. Thank you for writing it.

To the author of the negative comment 29/12/13, get a life! You couldn't have written a quality story like this, so dont be so disrespectful.

It was a long story,,,,,true. But it took that much time to become familiar with the characters and we were introduced to some special people.

I loved the soul searching and the honesty,

The sex was sweet and hot at the same time.

Very well done.

1. Love this story! And I love your style in general as well.

2. Two words best describe whoever left the anonymous comment dated 12/29/13... and they rhyme with "clucking grass-bowl".

This was by far the best 'full story' I've read on here, from the beginning to end you had my attention! I'd actually like to read this in even more detail.. make it a full book, it's that good honestly, and has sooo much more potential detail that can be added to each character!!! I've cried, laughed out loud, smiled, and was turned on throughout this read! This could be a best seller for sure!!! Thumbs up and keep up the good work!

I too believe in Karma, and have been rewarded many times over for even the smallest of good deeds. You take the filth out of what God has meant to be beautiful. I think that you are writing what Literotica should have. Thanks!

Realistic, but at 8 pages needlessly long.

good steamy climax

great story, great!

An excellent story that caught my attention. Each page that I turned was a great read. Please write more like this!

No rabid sex no wild parties just a gentleness that unfolded as it went along.....a beautiful story of the two of them and how their lives intermingled over a period of time....starting at the diner then her being thrown out on the streets and finally moving in to the flat....so tender...no rush just a gentle build up to the climax.....loved it - so tender - so loving and very moving...just brilliant...well done....

Just keep writing them and I'll keep reading them, and enjoying them.

...means the universe is rewarding your kindness, or lack thereof. I don't really see Karma at work around me, so it was nice to find it in a story.

It's been a while since I read one of yours, but I see you haven't lost your touch. It was quite a change from your usual edgy writing to something sweet, tender and possibly even heartwarming.

This is the best story I've read in a long long time. Good job

This was my favorite story from this challenge. I'm gonna have to reread this one. (I'm in the middle of another book right now, so Karma will have to wait. ;-)

I just sat here and could not stop reading to go to bed, i had to finish. You drew me in right away with your characters, and the way it all built, slowly coming to where you brought it...well....i loved it...it was so worth me looking again for the kind of story i knew someone would write...thank you, i thoroughly enjoyed it, and running off to see what else you have written....(angel)

Nice character development. Keep working on it. Great story idea and well crafted. Sorry to be anonymous but it's all I can spell. Thanks.

...the humor was delightful, especially the exchange among the diner customers. We'll written!

Very nice!!

Wow! A great love story! Real well written-5 stars!!!!

This is the type of story that I personally look for. Yes I enjoy the sex in these stories, but not at the expense of the story itself. And your writing is some of the highest quality I've seen on this site. Keep up the great work.

I loved this story, not only was it well written but it was filled with warmth, tenderness, passion and no small amount love. It was a pleasure to read.

Keep up the good work Laura.

KLN

Your story was not only extremely well written, it was thought provoking, touching with that wonderful erotic edge that is so hard to capture when writing. Thanks for sharing!! Cheers Lance

a great story with a lot of meaning hope to read more.

Very well written. There's the beginnings of a best-selling book here!

sequel in the future

THE STAR COUNTER IS BROKEN! IT WONT GO OVER 9000!!!!

Very well done! I much prefer this type of story. Excellent character development and pacing. Gladly gave you a 5.

JC

Well done... I like the story and the development very much. I was short enough to keep my interest while being long and detailed enough to be a great story. One of the Best.... Keep writing.

but please use 'dessert' consistently, nobody eats 'desert'. :>)

One of the few stories that I enjoy reading here. And its because of the way you write.

Thank you for that. And please, do not stop this. There aren't enough of your kind of writer around here right now.

That was a story you feel good about reading. The plot was intriguing. The characters were believable, and the ending was a great climax. Please write other stories like this one.

Gorgeously written! Such a beautiful flow all around, as usual. So very sweet, touching and romantic. The sex scene described in wonderful detail, VERY HOT! I was squirming with delight!

.. beautifully developed. Perhaps we all have a fairy godmother in our lives if we only listen. Thank you

Your story was well written and slowly built to it's climax while showing that "Good Deeds" usually get something good in return, and that doing the right thing (Payin it forward so to speak) always provides a suitable conclusion to good events.

First time reader and I enjoyed the story very much.

Excellent character development and when they finally overcame their inhibitions that was nicely erotic. Great story!

In reading other's comments all I can say is ya me too I feel that way and the ones who are not positive can go fly a kite

Excellent story, well written, holds the reader's attention. The story line builds the momentum to the actual point of coitus and the orgasmic climax.

This was a beautifully written story. I really enjoyed the start and the build up of repartee between the main characters. The 'Courtship' was very subtle on both their parts, as each was experiencing what the other was feeling. The 'Dinner Date' was the ice breaker and the ending was brilliant. A love story par excellence.

Please write more like this as the romance with a tinge of the erotic is a welcome change.

Beautifully written and highly erotic.

that is all Inhave to say - sums it up

I think you should do more like this, a lot of learning to love someone different but not too different!

That was an especially warm and tender story with a wonderfully romantic ending. Not so much an erotic story as a romance with an erotic ending. I look forward to your future submissions and will now look to see what else you've already written. Thanks.

Even without the erotic part (truly erotic rather than sex) it would be a great story.

As some comment said, if it was part of an e-book, I would gladly have paid for it.

I am bookmarking your name and looking forward to reading your contributions.

I loved the story and the story line, you have done a very good job and you seriously need to consider putting out a book, you would do very well with it.

This was an excellent story...nice build-up to passion and beyond. Keep up the great work!!!

As you said at the beginning the story took a while to unfold but it was certainly worth persevering to the end. I thoroughly enjoyed it, thank you.

I loved the character development. A sweet sappy story that really made me care about the characters. You have a real talent. You said in your intro that this was a stretch for you and you didn't know if you had it in you, but hopefully you do.

Fantastic story. Your writing style is great. This is real erotica not just a sex story.