All Comments on 'Kate and Alice - Family Jewels'

I love the twists and turns in this story. well done!

and the dialogue flows very naturally.

I hate it when bad writing gets in the way of a sexy story, and yours certainly is.

Pretty good for a first summation.

Nice sense of dialog. Nice sense of humor. Kate is the most interesting character. +5

Excellent job!!!!

You need to write more!

Don't stop writing you have the gift. That was so easy a 5 I didn't have to think.

You have an especially good sense of dialogue. It's witty, it moves. It lends a nice spark to your story and really serves to develop your characters.

But you need to proofread. As an anal-retentive, I saw way too many spelling and grammatical errors.

They detract from your story, and we don't want that.

Right?

Very good story, really enjoyed it. I hope you decide to continue with this or present another story. Some grammatical & spelling errors, but I enjoyed the dialogue & setting.

Great story!! Loved the humor, noticing the date I guess it would be wasted to ask for you to continue.

Very bad