by sramir2
But please get an editor. The spelling and grammatical errors were very distracting.
Otherwise a very fun read with likable characters that you really want to get together. The vile Mister Spencer being set up as the villain of the piece was fun to hate and the pacing fast and easy to read. Overall a fun read. Thanks for sharing it.
I agree it's a 5 stars. But you do need to get an editor. The spelling and grammatical errors were very distracting. As for the story its self it's very nice with likable characters that you really want to get together. Keep up the good work looking forward to the next intsallment. But please make it at least two pages to read as one page is just to short.
VERY BEAUTIFUL NARRATION ( except for a few typographical errors or could be grammatical also ?).
Any way very enjoyable story and hoping it would continue to be so in the ensuing pages..