All Comments on 'Katie and The Pizza Man'

Enjoyable story!

5

Wonderful story, I figured he probably owned the pizza business and wondered when you would reveal it. Well played and a very well written and well executed fantasy. Thanks for sharing. Once again you prove a good erotic story doesn't have to be just sex.

Cheers

SAGE

A wonderful story...nice twist at the end

That is the kind of story I come to Literotica for. Well crafted plot, vivid characters, and just enough sex to pull me to the edge of my chair. The great ending was the cherry on top.

The bird bit at the end was incongruous, but the story was nice.

Thanks

It telegraphed a bit early, but a good story nevertheless. I thought that the big company barbecue scene could have had a bit more drama, but it was ultimately a happy ever after kind of tale so that is your prerogative! As always, enjoyed your writing and Katie was a good narrator. Thanks! Looking forward to the next instalment of the Gliese Chronicles!

I gave it 5 stars.

I was hoping for a scene where someone says "Wait till my father hears of this outrage." I was also hoping for way more murder.

Excellent story, thank you so much!

I totally enjoyed this, Thanks for taking the time to build the story. CeeBee

Great story. The bird bit at the end was sweet and a reminder of interests. Glad the secret of the pnties was revealed. Well written again.

On page 1 on the day she was accosted by the guy when Clark stood between them, Maggie and John were there so then how on page 2 could John have invited his "friend" and it said John had never seen what had gone on? He and Maggie were there and this seems such a big hole in the story it stopped me reading on. Sorry, I think you need an editor.

Great Catch!

Thank you for pointing out this major gaff. It got past me and my editor. I have made the correction and will send a revision to have the original taken down. Sorry, it destroyed your ability to enjoy the story as I intended.

By the way, I would gladly have replied privately to insure a proper thank you was received. Posting as Anon doesn't allow for this, so sorry you posted this way. I hope you follow up by checking to see if I replied here. You have now made the story better. I'm pleased some readers are able to catch what I miss. Rachel

Thanks, Rach! All tied up in a sweet large bow!

More Good News stories, please!

i loved this story. you got me again, rachel! i have put a well deserved follow and 5 star on your story, tbh i would've given you a 10 if i could. the story unfolded nicely and i like your stories very much. keep 'em coming please!!

Well done.

Started out strange. Why would anyone want to get to know a guy who had sex with their friend just to cheer them up? That sounds like he’s taking advantage of sad, lonely women. If I ignore that weird introduction to that character, it was a good story

Excellent Story. Love the descriptions of sex from a women's perspective. I really enjoy the unique look of agony combined with ecstasy on a women's face and the head back stretched neck combination I am treated to when a woman has an orgasm. My favorite thing to watch. It appears that women actually (frequently, always?) have better orgasms than men and I am jealous of a woman's ability to have two, three .... twenty one right after the other or actually passing out for a bit from one.