All Comments on 'Kat's Pool Party'

I almost squirt myself this was so hot

This was great. The only way to make it better would be if one of the girls had a sister there. Maybe next time? Thanks for the story.

This is going to sound both positive and negative:

This is so good I hope you didn't steal it.

If you didn't, I hope you'll write some more - nice style and pacing.

Be careful about describing relative positioning - I couldn't get my head around who was where in relation to whom.

And I hope your chosen moniker doesn't mean what I thought it did.