by OcelotTreats
Poor start...or non start. Move along, nothing to see here!
Author needs to provide Something to keep us interested but falls flat on their ass, a waste of time imo.
First commenter: OcelotTreats DID say that this was "Chapter One".
OcelotTreats: This IS Literotica -- your readers are looking for a thrill in each chapter. Maybe a bit more detail about Ella and her lover David would have sufficed, since that seems to be a minor subplot for this story at this point.
Meh, not really much there to get in to, should have been longer for a starting chapter. No score til we see if you bother to continue.