All Comments on 'Kelly was so Beautiful Young Wife'

A few typos, but as usual, a great story from you!

"He jumped over a 7 foot high fence to help her" 1 meter equals 39 inches, 2 meters equals 78 inches.. What was he a pole vaulter?

....but a fun story, nonetheless.

But the only way to get better is to stay at it.

I just checked your bio. After seeing a list of all the stories and the scores you complied you certainly don’t want my advice; still I feel this one comment might be helpful. A basic tenet of story writing is show, don’t tell. You have simply told this story and in doing so stretched it to the point it became boring.

I repeat you have an interesting story line, well worth the time required to read, but think you could have improved it with my suggested change. HOWEVER—what do I know? GOOD LUCK and keep writing!

I watch for your stuff but it has been a long dry spell between excellent writing for you.

...was distracting.

Fun fuck story. Hoping for more Kelly and Daddy in the future.