All Comments on 'Key Lime Pie'

but I just couldn't seem to get into this story. It is well written as far as I noticed and you did have enough action and yet, even in the middle of a sex scene I could have put it down and not come back to it. Maybe the lack of foreplay played a part in this. I also question the incest part. Yes, the women were cousins, but it was written in such a way as to ignore the fact. I almost feel guilty about giving you three stars and not being able to point out exactly why. Since I hate to have people read my stories and not vote or vote low and not say why, I try not to do it to others. I don't want a dishonest evaluation either, so I don't give them. If others give you a glowing approval rate on this story, just chalk my comments up to the ramblings of a grumpy old man. Good luck and keep writing!

I have to agree with the Dreamer. It does come across as a well structured story. He can't work in an airport because he's distracted by the girls? I can understand that, but it also comes off as really juvenile. The guys apparent lack of self control riled me a little. Just didn't really grab my attention. Love the title, perhaps "Banana Cream Pie" would have been more fitting?

Well unlike Mafia and Dreamer i thought it was an excellent story,was written well,good story line...guess some people just don't know what a good story is...can't wait for another!!

I can only fantasize. How heavenly would that be, laying down screwing one and eating the other at the same time. Pure heaven. I would probably have died with a humungest smile on my face and my crank drooped down between my balls. Loved it (the story, I mean).

Where the hell did you buy that pizza in Chicago? Greasy? Uncut? And then you cut it into wedges instead of squares? Have you ever been to Chicago?