All Comments on 'Kidnapped Kristin Ch. 01'

I know this is the first chapter and all, but one could hope for a bit more story than just then descriptions of the main female characters.

The van didn’t have license plates, and in retrospect they should have noticed it.

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Even so, the van stopped behind a grocery store in the next town over and the men put different license plates on it and removed the magnetic plumbing supply decal from the side. A slave catcher doesn’t get far in the business without being very careful.

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Ok, nothing major, but people do like consistency.

I agree with the previous comment too.

Good luck with the next chapter.

Holy shit, learn to paragraph.

Crap

Love your writing and thoughts. Read it before you submit it.

I hope you plan to finish it!