All Comments on 'King Family Values Ch. 01'

Please go on.

This effort was much too brief!! You just reached the key moment then stopped. NOTHING happened. Why should I wait for the second chapter, I got nothing from the first!!!!!!!!!!!

This story is longer than anything you've written. For you to react so rudely means that yes, you did get something from the story. What you got wat a desire for more! The story created that same desire in me and I can't wait for chapter 2.

Definitely keep writing, just try to expand a little more, maybe dialogue and teasing each other.

Not worth reading at this length. Try 5 to 10 times longer, at least!

please cock levi hard....12 pouces

thanks for all the constructive criticism and comments everyone! i'll work on it, definitely. also, i had to stop there because there's a 750 word limit. sorry :( but it continues from here straight off in chapter two, which i've submitted for approval.

You might want to elaborate on that. I've seen stories of my greater length here, so that limit is NOT Literotica's.

.............And so far a very good read. I'll give you the benefit of the doubt, and assume you're laying a foundation for a story that shows great promise. For that reason and a definite show of writing talent, I gave you high marks.

the limit is a minimum not maximum all stories have to be atleast 750 words long OR longer just no shorter the writer just got lazy and wanted to stop.