by DefiantlySubmissive
Thank you :) I will definitely keep those tips in mind when I write my next short story!
I thought it was a good story. I think adding more back story to tell us how she came to be there. A little more detail in the sexual scenes. Definitely keep writing!
*smiles*
Very good first attempt at writing erotica. i would definitely like to see more backstory, but it is a good stand alone short story. Keep writing.
Thank you :)
I intended for this one to just be a short story, but I'll definitely be posting more content in the near future!
Hello, i really think that it's a good start. Now we need to know what happened to her, and how she fond herself in this situation. Please, go on.
Thank you for your feedback. However, if you cannot provide examples for content/areas that I can improve on then please do not comment at all. It's a little bit confusing, you see. If you didn't enjoy the storyline, that's okay, I posted this fully aware that such content is not approved by all.
Thank you <3
~ Defiantly Submissive ~
As it is your 1st story hence I wont post any discouraging comment. The thing is that read well to write well. Well tried but need a lot of improvements.