All Comments on 'Kyle's New Favourite Colour Is Pink'

Hot story !

A good start but a bit short. Hope to read a lot more soon.

use your big boy words and don't mix them up "he" not "her" remember you are talking about a man and his aunt she called him "princess" and him with an 11" cock she should be calling him sir or master or even king but not princess . good start and good tempting place to leave you hook the reader then leave them wanting more, but just remember to get your pronouns and sexes right read before you post and maybe get an editor that can also tell the difference would have been good except the pronouns and sexual confusion

Really nice erotica. It's different in it's sameness. I'm hoping you expand the characters and add the mom in for a threesome. My only criticism is to do a reread slowly. You'll catch many of the small mistakes that interfere with the flow. Keep the good work coming.

Door was lock. How did it get unlocked?

Although the premise and set up of the story was good either the author is very young or illiterate as they have a problem with pronouns, and an extremely vivid imagination as to the size of male appendages. With a little work at rereading your work you might be able to correct the mistakes in the language you would be well advised to lower your sights as to the sizes of human anatomy so that the story might be just a little more believable. Keep working and you eventually will come around I'm sure.

Not to bad for your first try. As others have mentioned, proof read your work before submission. Better yet have a friend check it first, then do your own check.

The story line was a good one. More practice and you will do great hear.

hence all the emphasis on how big his dick is and how chiseled his abs are. The kid won't get an editor because he's underage, any adult caught helping him write anything like is is gonna do time. Pathetic wish fulfillment from a teenage wank-addict, 1 star

I know 5-year-olds that can write better than that, give it up your writing is shit. gave you a minus 100,000,000 stars

almost seems as though this is a rewrite of an uncle-niece interaction - leaving in "sit there princess" is the real give away fro me although the constantly changing sense of gender for the protagonist and the odd change for the antagonist is also annoying

as for the door being locked: it never happened; it was asked for but the protagonist (Kyle) did not do it, instead moving to a chair.....

And no more of this shit pleeeeaasssse

The grammar is bad. The genders constantly back and forth. It's like nobody ever proofread the piece before submitting it. Very juvenile. Needs a lot of work.

I agree with most of the other comments...especially the correct usage of words. Also, the story CLEARLY stated that Kyle DID lock the door!! Thus, nobody could have walked in on Kyle and Auntie. Just one of the many errors of the story that could have been corrected BEFORE submitting it, making it much more believable and erotic. Take your time, next time.

Very poor.

Grammar, writing style, genders, just pitiful.

The story idea was fine as was the story itself but you should proof read it a few more times and pay attention to the things others have pointed out. It would be a better idea to have someone else do it for you as they will catch things you wont. Ignore the ultra negative comments and try again.