by Sir Galahad
A great and compelling story. I couldn't stop reading it even when the laptop battery died, I had to get online fast!
Well done! I look forward to reading more of your writing!
So glad to see you have written another story. It is great, very readable. Please do not wait so long to submit another one.
Wonderful delightful story with well thought out characters. Despite its extreme length, I was compelled to finish reading it. I might have preferred to have it broken up into shorter pieces but on second thought, that might have ruined the narrative. All in all, an excellent story.
The obviously talented author was off to a great start, but just got carried away. Our middle-aged plumber with social issues is really a multi-gazillionaire with the world's coolest house.... Starting with an interesting idea, adding a strong plot line and we have the makings of a great story. Having the hero be so completely free of flaws, so perfect, distracts from the story and makes for a fairy tale. I know it is only erotic fantasy, but a touch reality for the characters would be an improvement.
The best story I have read on this site. Well thought out and an excellent mix throughout. Will look for more stories from you. Will recommend it to others
It took a while, but I got this one read. The story went places I didn't expect, but I enjoyed every bit of it.
now that was a story worth reading, great job hope to see more stories from you soon
You've penned a story for Literotica readers that is solidly in the tradition of Grand Master Robert A. Heinlein's Future History! Herein John the plumber rises above every obstacle and triumphs over all adversity to win the love and loins of Dee Dee the sacred slut in this tale reminiscent (to this reader) of the classic legacy engendered by Lazarus Long.
I applaud your mastery of your craft.
You are a truly phenomenal Lit writer!
This story has a bit of everything that makes, for me, a great work of penultimate Literotica. I came here looking for a spicy bit of smut and find myself (4 hours later) dazzled by your heroic opus of modern gallantry intertwined with the juicy porn that keeps me coming back to Lit.
I'll look for more of your writings with eager anticipation.
Thank you for sharing Lady Behind the Wall.
Bravo!
A wonderful story, a great cast of characters, and a great ending. What more can we ask for. you are a great story teller. Thanks for this read.
No other words can describe it. Perfect devolopment, excelent introduction of characters along with small tidbits of info most autors tend to leave out, not making it a story in which everything is perfect with the characters or having some random developent like having her pregnannt a the end through some medical miracle. Added to the fact that the ending perfectly ties to the beginning and her wishes, truly an excelent story worthy of 10 stars (that is out of 5 btw).
You only got 11 comments and 15 favs for this story? Are you fucking kidding me?! Just goes to show you how fucking shitty people's tastes can run. 10/10 man. Great fucking story! Fucking epic!
*Very* enjoyable read!
It's not terribly difficult to understand why there's so few comments and faves for this story. It is, after all, a rather long thirty pages. (yeah, it's not as long as some stories on here, but it *is* longer than the vast majority of stories on here)
Excluding thact that the word count of this story alone may well eclipse the sum of all other stories you have writen, this tale of love is an absolute gem. Bravo on the finest piece of wordsmithing I have ever found on this site, Sir Galahad. Bravo.
I think this is what many people aspire to.
The love of someone who would do anything for you, and you for them.
Add to this the offer of redemption (Deirdre - in several ways), a bit of spice of various kinds (Domination, submission, threesome)
it seems to be a fantasy many should like.
Many may back off when they see that the story is thirty pages long, but it is well worth the perseverance and is delightful and interesting from the word go. I amazed that no good actress decided to take this guy over long before. For the life of luxury to be gained his social shortcoming should be in easy to ignore. Luckily for him he found the perfect partner. How he localized her is fascinating...
This story is absolutely wonderful. It is a delightful romp and worthy of your time to read.
Thanks for posting this engrossing yarn. You remain true to your goal of submitting well written and plotted erotic tales. Seconding the Heinlein-style digressions and details, though Neal Stephenson also comes to mind along these lines. I wonder, just who is Sir Galahad? Does he write professionally? From experience? Interesting main character; fits with the somewhat pedantic digressions. Nice views into diverse worlds (wildfire fighting, women's work camp, demi monde night life, off the grid). At any rate thank you for *slaving* over and *submitting* these incendiary entertainments for our *pleasure.* - LiteroticAddict47
Been a long time since I've met a friend of Jeeves.
Your taste in reading is as good as your skill in writing.
Congratulations
I thoroughly enjoyed this. My only complaint is too much use of the "my love, my darling" stuff as it got old quickly. But I'm nitpicking. Fantastic story!
1st gf lft him bcoz he was not rich.
And for ladybehindthewall he was buying crazy dresses....
After the lady got releases they were only fucking....
No strong plot after the release of the girl....
For me thats why not good...
i like it all the way through. for a man to take a chance on some one like her & find the pot of gold at the end of the rainbow.
I constantly fond myself awake late at night reading it that was a great experience and I loved every second of it please right more good story's I promise to read them all ;) thanks a again for the good read.
I enjoyed this story. I could see a sequel or at least incorporating these characters into a future story. Keep up the good work. Now to check out some of your other entries.
That's not Harshaw's Law.
This is Harshaw's Law:
Daughters can spend ten percent more than a man can make in any usual occupation.
I don't know who to attribute a rule to eliminate profiles written by near illiterates to, but it's a good idea.
When the reader first meets Jubal's Harshaw in Stranger in a Strange Land, it is observed that all of Jubal's secretaries are very efficient and very beautiful. Jubal's regards this as being most efficient. Although you're correct that the Harshaw's Law he wisecracked in passing to the Captain is the official one, I've always thought Jubal's observation about the desirability of beauty and competence existing in the same woman as being a great thing as the real Harshaw's Law.
But you lost me when Dierdre had sex with the pilot and then had Cleo visit John. And also the rationale behind those actions.
Enjoyed it but a bit too long, it took most of the morning to read.
This is a well-written and interesting story, with good character development. Given its length it need not be read in one sitting. The sex scenes are well-written, but too few in number, especially given the talent of the writer. This story deserves a sequel.
I enjoyed every bit of this, especially the handling of the grandmother for the wedding. Bravo.
You describe every insignificant item and activity in way to much trivial detail. I couldn't finish the story. You wore me out with details. Story was good for the first fifteen pages but then got repetitive in the extreme. You and James A Mitchener should have had a verbosity contest before he died. Get to the points clearly and directly, then embellish them. Keep the core story line cohesive throughout. Too muck detail clouds the story.
Think i have read this 5 or 6 times now. Always love it. I know its been like 8 years since you posted but i would love a sequel.