by slyc_willie
It would just have been nice if the guy could have been reprieved somehow, and if Megan hadn't turned out to be a manipulative bitch, and probably a liar too.
I first read this story several days ago. I wasn't sure how I felt about it as I read it. His contept for himself, the struggle to come to terms with what he'd done seemed to leave no option. Although I harbored the hope, I somehow knew James was going to die, that there would be no reprieve. It seems like he was a decent guy who got out of control.
After reading the story, I've spent the last few days thinking about it. So many stories are gone from my memory almost before I've finished reading them. This one I can't quite get out of my head. And I find myself thinking about the comments others have left. The comment about how it was too bad she was a manipulative, lying bitch made me wonder. Was she really? Perhaps she was at first, but as the relationship between them changed, perhaps her manipulation ended. Her final comments seem to reveal a connection with James. My belief is that, in the end, she really wished things could have ended differently, but knew that they couldn't. And I beleive the two men that James confessed to may have wished the same thing. But as this world only exists in the minds of the author and his readers, we can believe anything we wish.
Keep on doing your thing, Slyc. I'll be back to check on your progress.
Decent guy (your best voice), terrible situation. Gotta say, at first I thought she was in the same boat. Then I saw it coming, but didn't mind because of the way you handled it. He didn't get a reprieve, but he did find happiness, and that is the best we can hope to have in this life.
That was a fantastic story which was wonderfully written. The passion and sexual scenes involved were perfectly fitted into the storyline. Well done!
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I figured out early that she was the weapon, but you know what....it didn't matter. A brilliant piece of writing.
I figured who the terminator was about two thirds thru the story. Quite a tale! I must say that a governmental organzation, with its bureaucratic bent, could never have planned and implemented such an emotionally charged program. But realism is not a key judgement factor in enjoying fiction. Thanks very much for this fabulous tale, Slyc_willie!
All my stories have the same central theme: young women taking control of their own lives through the vehicle of prostitution. My heroines are not, with one notable exception, powerless victims.
Your stories make me want to open the choke on my shotgun and touch on a greater variety of issues. Thanks.
This is well thought out, excellently written; I'm glad you resisted the temptation to write a happy ending. Please keep writing. Thanks
about this one is that it was well written and engaging. Scotty
If instead of saying, "I'll be here" if he'd said something like, "It's OK. Don't feel bad - I deserved this."
Giving her that last moment realization that he knew what she'd done and had accepted it...
But good story nonetheless...
A story without a ‘happy’ ending. It actually makes it better.
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