All Comments on 'Late Night and a Broken Ball Pt. 02'

The story needs polish or as some say grammar work to fix rough spots. These as such as: "does as he asks" which should be "do as he asks" found by doing a good proof reading.

what kind of lawyer did he have that let him give up his 401 in a divorce to a cheating wife?he should have got anything he wanted not gave up everything he made.i would not trust that lawyer to pay a speeding ticket.

Please don't let it be too long !

This is one of the better stories I've read and hope there is more between them and that the daughter finds hers

It is ok to be critical but have the guts to sign your remarks!

A proof reading trick: read your material backwards, it helps you focus on the word and then the sentence. If you do this it will force brain to not glide over things you just wrote and actually "see" what is written.

BTW not the first time I read this, but they wont let me vote again