All Comments on 'Late Night Music Ch. 02'

Just be careful switching perspectives. you might want to do something like an extra hard return or something so that we know you are doing so.

I hope you will let us hear Ryan's perspective in the next chapter. What is he feeling/thinking where women and men are concerned and with Riley personally. good beginning. I like that you are pretty descriptive. Try to use as many of the senses in describing things. Makes it more real to the reader.

ignore the moaning gits . this is a cool story. just hope you manage to finish it