All Comments on 'Laura'

Excellent story and writing. The multiple voices of Laura lent a cleverness and unique aspect to what was happening. I'm sure many people don't think things happen that fast but, why not. May have to check other of your writing.

I was wondering if anyone was reading it. Yes, it was fast as things tend to be on here, I think that is the nature of the genre. Anyway, thanks. Comments are the best feedback! Glad you enjoyed!

I forgot to mention in the previous comment that the story seemed to dance or skip along with a bouncy rhythm and I found I was smiling as I read. Made the whole thing just fun to read.

Enjoyed this with a smile! Would be great to have a chapter 2!

I really enjoyed the story...wish it could've been longer! There was a smile on my face the whole time. I loved your character development, Laura is such a fun person! Keep up the good work.

Oh, by the way, you have another really great character "Natalie" She's also fun and interesting. I think there's a good bit more that you didn't tell us about Miss Natalie!

Please tell us more and continue Natalie's story.

Thanks for all your great stories!

TD

had me laughing out loud. Glad the heart and mind finally agreed with the pussy. 5 stars.

Seriously, it is nice to know someone has read my stuff. I do have plans to continue this but I have a lot of irons in the fire at the moment. Yes, I am working on a Natalie chapter, as well as the 5 years over due continuation of Jessica, and another Adele. Oh, and a couple more new stories. Well, three at the moment. I will publish as I get them done. Thanks for the comments!

Will you marry me?

Light-hearted...Sweet...Adorable...

Your interior monologues are FABULOUS!

New favorite author! Lucky me! I get to read your other stories!

Thanks, so much!

Great story Jessie. I love your writing and the way you pull the reader into the inner-dialogue and internal wrestling. I could swear I was right there on the beach, under the cabana and in the mind of Laura. Great job! I'm looking forward to reading more of your stories!

Wonderful Story! I really enjoyed her inner dialogue - and the fact that she had 3 voices. Normally, I'd expect two - heart and head - but in this case the third made it so much more effective. And the repetition of 'F him! F his brains out!' made me laugh, although I laughed throughout at other parts, too. And appealing to the judges for a ruling was great.

I thought we were headed for a fun first day and evening, and then sex perhaps the next day - particularly when she asked for patience. I thought his taking her top off right after her saying she didn't want to move too fast was a bit insensitive on his part. I would have had him moving a bit slower. But you're the author and write the story you want to write.

But still a definite 5* story. Thanks for sharing!