by JBEdwards
You took a story with promise bent it over and just fuel the trash out of it. Great job ruining the story
Magic fingers? Bad enough. Sentient magic fingers? Ludicrous. I couldn't get past page 3. Your tone is very formal, and your characters are one dimensional. I think you are a good writer, but fantasy, let alone erotica, is not your genre.
this story is very good you should continue it i sugest they touch fingers again
The story was going great but you completely Trashed it in the end. What the hell happened?! You forgot what you were writing or what?!
Message vs. massage
Prone vs. supine
Too many simple errors for me. Weak plot to start with. Didn’t finish your story.
Ignore them, I enjoyed the hell out of it! Thank for another fun fantasy read!
Thank you all for your comments. I appreciate the negative ones and of course the positive ones. Every author likes it when someone likes a story. So a big thank you especially to JJMemaw0623!
Damn why didn't melissa stay.... so quickly the end game....
Rest of the story was very interesting read...