All Comments on 'Legacy'

Dam what a great story hope to read more soon

Another great read hope that you carry this one on and maybe weave in some of your other characters from previous stories somewhere along the way as I love the way that you seem able to interweave all your stories together into one epic universal setting looking forward to chapter 2

Sequel Please

I got lost in the story. In a good way. It's a fantastic scenario. Even without the magic this would be one of my favorites. Only teenie tiny drawback, not illustrated.

Loved the story, well written and it just draws you in.

You have done it again .A great story that I hope has more chapters coming .You and TheOrkKing aka DeSoul are two of the best writers on here I can read your stories over and over .That is the greatest gift of a true writers ,stories that a person will read more then once . Thanks for the story and hope you do more soon my friend .

If you do not continue this wonderful story I will hunt you down and do painful things to you!!!!!! Seriously, a great tale that I enjoyed greatly. I look forward to it's continuation.

What else can I say. Always been a fan of your writing, so please keep going. :-) Dam....this one is excellent.

Part 2 is being written right now, yes? Has me thinking Warehouse 13 and Indiana Jones just made a porno... I request moar please.

Another --Legacy-- in the making. I hope you keep this as a separate storyline. It's great on it's on.

"Brilliant" read, mind control not usually a genre I enjoy, you have been able to produce an enjoyable read, I would be disappointed leading to my questioning your commitment to both you characters and readers, if this story did not progress and evolve in the manner it has started out.

Absolutely fantastic and PAR Excellence, but it needs more as he explores for those other books.

Hope it continues love the storyline and the Mystery of it all can't wait for the next chapter

I sure hope there will be more!!!!!!

I would like to thank everyone for their kind words and suggestions. I am alternating between the next chapter of Mr. Robinson and Legacy part two. If you have any suggestions feel free to post them. I have decided to keep it in the Shawverse but as a fairly stand alone piece. There might be background events in the news that mention more prominent events but with little chance of interactions with major characters. Thanks to everyone following me, i have broken the 2600 mark!! I owe it all to you.

Please write a chapter 2. This story is way to good to leave here.

Great story keep it going

I want this to be a series and have it never end!!!!!!

Awesome all around.

Fascinating and well written. More please.

This is one of the best stories that I have read on Literotica. Very well written and great imagination. Hope to read a contination of Legacy soon.

If you don't continue this story, I will hunt you down and spread rumors in your community that you're an evangelical Christian!

Great story!!

Hi, a very compelling read, your vision for this story is just on another level.

Thanks for a suburb read and hope you continue it as a series.

Thanks again. 😄

I don't comment much but for the love of god dont you dare leave us hanging.If any troll gets you down or says some b.s. fuckem they wish they wrote it. Very very good.

I like this story it's good are you going to add to it

Damn this is good. Is there a part 2?

I know you said this was going to be a One off, but you need to continue this... it feels like a beginning not an end.

I hope you plan to continue with this story line.

Wow, great job! I agree with the other commenters, this should not be a one off. More please.

This is not a short Short story, but a well crafted story of love desire and magic. Oh how I wish the story was true. I will not spoil it for you, please read it yourself and enjoy.Maybe if enough of us reader ask nicely there wifi be more parts.ccec

Loved it...quite long but worth it. I'm ready for second chapter

Finally an erotic story that doesn't read like a bad porn movie.

Well planed, well written and basically a very GOOD interesting story

Part two is a must , just keep it at the same level key as this one and it'll be another hit.

Thanks for a great read .

PK

He is supposed to be the heir why does he not know these things?every female was fucked by some other male family member and he knows nothing

this seems to be a fun and adventurous story to read.

will look forward to more chapters to read.

thank you

Has hints of other stories could be a bridge but not looking for that but most definitely need to finish the second part or the rest of the series if you take it as far as nick shaw and the series that involve him and all his incarnations the way you write seriously draws me in like a well scripted cinematic masterpiece

One of the best i read in a long time looking for parr to now thanks

A five star story. Waiting for the next part.

Best story I have read on here in a very long time! Keep it up.

Stayed for the Magic and Utter hilarity of te story, Please make the Boardgame a real board game, I need it, also please for the love of the Gods write more to this story.

I really hope this is part of the Iron Rain universe and gets tied in with the rest of the fantastic tale. We've missed your contributions LB

Nice how do I get a family like this. More more more. Great read

The story completely exceeded any "expectations" I had when looking at the title and recognizing the author. To my surprise the entertainment factor when reading this was ,to a surprisingly large part, generated by the setting and the story's general "vibe" and not "only" the erotic actions of the characters. Happy to read more in the future...

I was a skeptic when I read the category. I was surprised by the creativity. Plus, it was just plain fun.

The reality is, this could fit in multiple categories.

To tell the truth I was only amused by the magic spells in this story but it stil gets 5 stars from me

Getting ready to settle in for a nice long read here. Well crafted setting and nice flow - the sexual exploits get exhausting along the way, but are used well as fuel and lubrication for the story. So... five stars and a new favorite author. Nice1.

I tried reading a couple of your incest stories, but in my personal opinion, you just jump right into incest without setting up any backstory, flirting, teasing, angst, or anything that puts the incestuous act into context.

In this story, a guy attends his grandfather's funeral, then later that night as soon as you introduce his sister to the story, the first thing he does is eat her pussy.

In A Brief Moment of Insanity, a mother comes home soaking wet on a rainy night, and for no apparent reason her son and daughter strip her naked and dry her off (no mention of shivering, hypothermia, or any reason why she can't do this herself), then a couple of hours later the mom starts sucking the son off, and neither has any issue with this act.

While your prose is very well written, there's no "reader foreplay" leading up to the incest (or any sex act). It's beyond 'suspension of disbelief' to ask the reader to imagine; "Hi mom, how are you?" "I'm fine son. Is that a boner in your pants?" "Yeah, sorry, I got hard looking at you" "That's OK, let's fuck!".

There needs to be some angst, such as a son getting turned on by his mom, or a brother getting turned on by his sister(s), and him chastising himself in his thoughts for being perverted or whatever. There needs to be at least some reluctance by both (or all) parties to getting involved with a family member. The sex act is the "payoff" that the story should lead up to. Once your character has fucked his mom or sister, there's really not much more to be said that would be a turn on to the reader. You could try to prolong interest by starting out with teasing, copping a feel, maybe moving on to a handjob, then a blowjob, then fucking, then anal or some storytelling device.

I didn't vote, since I didn't finish any of your stories. I just thought you might like some constructive criticism. There's always room for improvement. As I said, I really like your prose. Cheers!

The growing harem aspect is over the top but still an enticing read. 4.5 stars

This is a wonderful story, in its concept and in its delivery. It is one of the three best Fantasies I have ever read, and I/m looking forward to its continuation for the resolution of the story. Thanx for the Read!

I loved the story now you need to make more about him hiding the other journal and going back home and his new life with his new lovers lol I would love to see more about this family

this was everything. a main character who had morals, while still enjoying sex. A family that was neither resentful or nasty because of his grandfather's actions and therefore he didnt suffer for it. A mystery that needs to be unraveled to the point the MC lives a "normal" routine. if this was a erotic novel series, id pay whatever Amazon charged for it. truly amazing.

What an incredible, not your average story... 5 STARS... Probably could've continued the story...Added as a favorite...

This story was definitely different and unexpected that’s for sure. I hope you continue on with this story I can’t wait to see which way you go with this. Five stars for your effort.

Extreme potential in this plot, its absolutely amazing. The details need some flushing out in many spots for clarification and it really needs an editor as there are numerous times errors are left out entirely and sentences make zero sense

Enjoyed it a lot. Gave it 4/5 should have been 5/5 but him playing, knowingly with another man’s wife, lost the point. He should not use his power to make women cheat on their husbands. The pain he can cause Tom their families is just so wrong on any level. Nobody likes cheaters.

(3/25/2022) This was a very enjoyable read. Earning an easy five stars. Glad I checked out your submissions list before I commented and made a fool of myself begging for more chapters. There are nine "Legacy" sequels. This one went on my favorites list. I hope you brought back the crazy aunt. She was interesting. Well done.

HOT! 5 BIG FAT BLAZING STARS!

Enjoyable, I look forward to reading the rest of the tail. However, I can only give you 4 out 5. For a couple of reasons. The first (and biggest) is that Tom had no idea what was going on. Grandpa should have started his education at 18 when he got his tattoo and not drop it on him. This is like giving a loaded pistol to a 12 year old who has only played with nerf guns. They don't understand the dangers. Secondly, bringing in his Aunt and having to have her committed (basically). His mother could have warned him. And again, if Grandpa had done his job and educated Tom correctly, then he wouldn't have done what he did to his Aunt (again, a lack of experience). Lastly, it seems his mother and sisters knew what the deal was, but it was "keep Tom in the dark". It just takes away what could have been a very erotic coming of age. So I cannot agree with it being a 5 *'s entry.

This story has promise. Try to focus on Thomas finding out more about his inheritence, less on fucking his family...

Loved this story and gave it a 5!!!

Awesome series love it 5 stars

Fuck, YES!!!

Your characters lack depth. The story is amazing, but its foundation is tenuous. I suppose I wanted it to be more than it is.

The writing is tremendous. Some of the dialogue is a bit too child like, but WOW did the "plot" move too fast. Further ludicrous speed, we now have legacy speed.