All Comments on 'Lessons for My Son Ch. 06'

It looks like you are beginning to get down business. As a reader, I am looking for action to begin. In ch 4, you left us of with mom wanting to visit her son's apartment. Ch 5 was ok, ch 6 was overkill, especially after what you gave us in Ch 4. Other than that, looking forward to reading more.

I like where this is going, but it feels quite disjointed. Part 4 we had 'face to face' interaction between father and son, and mom thinking about visiting her son. Then two more parts that are back to written thoughts. Doesn't flow well, makes the reader wonder what the overall plan is, and would benefit from being longer individual parts.

I agree with tallman. You dangled the possibility of the mom going off to visit the son at the end of chapter 4 and then went back to the boring as white toast directions for the next two chapters. Hopefully you'll have a chapter told from the mom's pov. That should be interesting.