All Comments on 'Let Go'

I liked the story, but the perspective changes were jarring as hell. You can't switch from first to second person in one sentence and still be talking about the same person!

I enjoyed the story it had a good ending. One thing I did notice was that Dave never found out or Bev never mentioned her date and kiss with Bob after she had fired Dave.

Brilliant! I’m getting soft in my old age. Loved how the love story developed later – how everything worked out for them like a Mills and Boon Novel 5 – Stars!

Love it!

Well 1 you need a editor or a better editor at least there was a lot of typos and errors in this story as the story goes it self I can see the point of view from both sides I see her side of things as a former retired business owner myself you do have to do what you feel is best for the company I also see he side of things as well the way she went about firing him was the wrong the way as it went against company policy was he right in going after them for wrongful termination if that was the only reason then yes however it was stated and led to believe that was not the only reason so with that being said no he wasn't while I get there was underlying problems within there marriage to start with he was in the wrong for allowing the event that took place in business part of there life's to determine what took place in their personal life those 2 things should always be kept separate they never mix not even if both parties work together unless both have the same position and pay or both own the business 50/50 however they didn't have those things again i see both sides i have to agree with both views equally when I started my business i didn't have that issue to start with cause i was single when I got married i learned quickly to leave work at work not bring it home then after being married to my wife for like 6 years I signed 50 percent of the business to her that was 17 years ago now in case of a divorce she can get only the worth of half the business which sold for a million so half of that she still works part time for the people that bought us out doing there pay roll and taxes

I loved this story and the writer, but I don't understand the frequent references to doubtful pregnancies in the late 30's? She was in her late 30's but she missed the proverbial boat for kids?? I don't get it..this is becoming the new normal for US families concentrating on financial stability before family..( it's a mistake )

Thanks Q for another wonderful story

Opinionated1

good story but too sweet at the end.

It's a very good story, I enjoyed it very much. I felt like Marsha kind of dissappear at the end. I would've enjoyed more interaction and a bigger story between the whole family including the grand children. Still, it was great!

I loved it. Thank you for sharing a great story.

What Roktot said, but certianly none of that crap dispensed by The Hypercritics.

Loved it! You even manage to make Beverly likeable at the end. This is quite an acomplishment, considering how she was at the beginning of the story. 5 stars. Thank you very much!!

The would up drinking way too much

They wound up drinking way too much

what he had won. he had, without a doubt, destroyed the woman I was supposed to love and support.

what he had won. He had, without a doubt, destroyed the woman he was supposed to love and support.

Not really. he knew how much she loved that job

Not really. He knew how much she loved that job

He stood, placing my hand on her shoulder

He stood, placing his hand on her shoulder

She had let my ego get the best of her

She had let her ego get the best of her

he had bought her the first year we were together

he had bought her the first year they were together

H got his baby settled

He got his baby settled

Marsha had Ari and was waiting with Sol and Susan

Marsha had Ari and were waiting with Sol and Susan

Excellent!

Great Story but, we never find out what she did with the car she bought for him to finish his restoration project and the last page feels rushed. On the second read it feels as like someone took it upon themselves to edit down the story without the author's permission. It's still a good story and with a little work it could be a fantastic story. (The Whoo)

This is my second read and enjoyed it just as much as I did the first read. Great story.

Ahhhhh.

The beauty of fiction ..

Though perhaps, additional character depth to understanding the wife could've been added.

Woman in power rarely make good wives even if they make great mother's.

Thank you for this story. Wonderfully written, nothing over the top and seamlessly told.

Cya,

Tob

Firstly, a few minor complaints: editing needed, typos, transitions in the dialogue and story, etc.

Not sure why the author thought that 36 is too old to have a child. Many older mums these days wait and still have happy, healthy families.

The story was wonderfully done and really drew the reader in; some of the comments from folks who griped about the issues shows how deeply the story caught their interest.

Too bad I can’t give it a 10. So a “golden” 5 will have to suffice. Thank you for sharing your story.

The level of disrespect he got from his wife was not good but please don't remotely compare it to a full fledged affair. Not in the same galaxy of disrespect. If a reader feels she needs to be burned for how she got tricked and played, take a look and ask yourself some pertinent questions about life and relationships. Seriously.

Another good piece from a Literotica master. Thoroughly enjoyable. BardnotBard

For those of ye keen on perusing the original version of these Wife CEO fires Hubby tales, try looking up M Moreau's "Jill Rodgers and Donald Young".

For a story that started out so strong and full of promise is went down hill fast. From the 36 being too old to the bizarre and insulting idea of the rich white knight riding in and taking over the lives of those less fortunate... Oh and let's not forget the 18 year old that at times behaves like a preteen. Such a shame as the writing skills are obviously there.

I gave this story 5 stars .. Yes their were some mistakes but everyone makes mistakes ..

Grab all the money and move to Ecuador day one.

great story five stars.

I enjoyed the story well the first half, but it turned into the 'Beverly takes command' in the second. OK Dave possibly got a little more respect but it was all Beverly did this, Beverly told him to go to church Beverly told Dave to get a car. Hardly the equal partnership was it? Just once I would have liked Dave to be 'all over her' like he said he would be if she acted like that. She really hasn't learned much and Dave is still the doormat.

5 stars for the first half 2 for the second.

Really enjoyed the story!

It was a great read, even if it was a very forced RAAC! Never would have happened in the real world. Just too much disrespect shown from Beverly.

Speaking of that, how is it that such a hard charging tough as nails CEO spends most of the story sobbing? And, she is so easily duped by an obvious opportunist. It just defies credibility. 4* because of the entertainment value

Nope sorry this one doesn't work for me. Not at all. She robbed him of his life, his dreams and there's no way she can give them back to him. He should have divorced her and sued the living shit out of that company, destroying her.

Just finished reading for the third time, I'm always a sucker for a happy ending.

I absolutely loved it. The story was greatly written and it warmed my heart when they decided to adopt the two girls into their family. Being adopted myself, it's really special when you can choose your family

This is one of my "comfort" stories. It cheers me up and leaves me on a positive mood without being saccharine. Sometimes, after reading too many other LW stories I need to be cheered up. Thanks.

LMJ

Having read (countless times), rated (5⭐️), and favorited this story, it’s still a fun read for me. I read it almost every time it pops up in my feed. It’s a good feel good story, and one I can relate to, having worked for several female bosses and seen first-hand the lengths they’re willing to go to for the position. Also, for the Anonymous commenter wondering about corruption, those deals happen all the time. They don’t violate the laws, so no recourse. Just your reputation if the terms aren’t followed.

Liked the story. Long after reading it for the first time, it strikes me about how corrupt it would be to give someone a sweetheart deal to secure a job for your spouse. Also, that company's President will own her in any future negotiation. He seems like a guy who'd throw her under the bus without a second thought.

Another read of this great story, one of my favorites. I overlook the minor imperfections and unreality of it in places to go along with the general flow of a beautiful love story and how they managed to rescue that love.

Nope, not buying any of it, especially the emotional manipulation with the two younger girls. Dave could help take care of them without Beverly. Self-absorbed and useless in a marriage, no way taking her back is a good idea or would turn out how it was written. Not a chance!

1. First five pages excellent

2. From then on too many perfect situations.

3. The story was over once Beverly was pregnant but the author didn't recognize it.

4. Keep writing, you are good and will get even better.

Ok so I think the overall story here was pretty good and I don't really have many complaints about this but I'm going to nit pick... because that is the privilege of being an anonymous reviewer.

Firstly the author several times jumps from a third person perspective into a first and it's quite jarring. "She pulled her into our lap"

Secondly I think this author should study female biology a little. Women are perfectly capable of getting pregnant at 38, it's a little old yes but menopause doesn't start until women are usually in their mid to late 40s. And by all accounts Beverly is in Good physical health so while she would have reduced odds of pregnancy at her age its certainly not zero. Also you cannot determine the gender of a baby at 8 weeks. It's sort of possible around 14 weeks but to be sure most doctors aim for around 18 - 21 weeks.

That aside, to all the people out there sating Dave should have divorced Beverly and that RAAC sucks... the story makes it pretty clear from the out set that it's that kind of story and just because you wouldn't have behaved in the same way doesn't mean everyone would. Often relationships are a minefield and I can speak from personal experience that betrayal does not switch off love.

Anyways a good story, could do with better grammar checking and editing. A little more research of female biology too! 4/5

I very much enjoyed this story. Despite the treatment Dave received from Beverly - both professionally and personally... Despite the lack of respect Beverly showed him... because there was no adulterous behavior by either spouse... I always had a feeling that reconciliation was remote possibility . but only if Beverly humbled herself, saw the error of her ways, and began treating Dave with the respect he was due as her spouse. In the end, love is what made it all possible. 5 Stars

I could add this guy is clearly a great writer and it may or may not be to my credit but this woman would never get another chance to betray me.

After all, I said great writing did I not Karen?

AC,

Don’t forget, I have high praise for some. Whether or not I write does not validate or invalidate my opinion.

I’m thinking take everything liquid and disappear to Ecuador

I think that the issue here is that too many readers get locked into an early view of who they either think the characters are, or who they want them to be. Then some “Damascus Road” experience happens, altering the trajectory they expect or desire. Yes, in this case the transition could have been made more convoluted, but people do on occasion, see the error of their ways when it is brought rudely to their attention, and in rare instances real change does occur. Then surprisingly good things may follow. Qhml1 followed a path to that end, and did it well, in site of bad editing! Good story, some interesting characters, and I enjoyed it in spite of the distractions of too many lapses of grammar.

Schwanze1 has all sorts of disparaging remarks to make about other peoples writing, and so many ideas about how stories should end, mostly in f*&^ing disasters, but I note that this brilliant author has not submitted one story to this site to be rated against that which he seems to despise. I suppose it is so common, if you can’t do it criticize those who can so you will feel better! Yes, this is a rant. I don’t love every story I read, and I try to be honest in my evaluations, but you can also read my scribbling here to bomb my efforts. If your only talent is crass disparagement then go get a career in demolition, perhaps we will all be fortunate and you will blow yourself up!

In a time where the first reaction is to throw away whatever causes a bad situation, it is encouraging to see that sometimes, working through the hard times, can be surprisingly beneficial. In this instance, so much life came as a result of the conflict.

Third or fourth time through this story, if I didn't love I wouldn't read it again. Good story, Q!

Great writing but adios bitch

This is bad, really, really bad. This is a forced, unwarranted, and undeserved RAAC. For the same reasons as raised by other posters.

I feel this story should have ended on page 3. The author repeatedly telegraphed in the story that this was a RAAC. I do like a good RAAC but not this one. The damage and humiliations done by the wife were so severe that this should have ended in divorce and his life well lived. The rest of the story after page 3 is well written and somewhat enjoyable but does not fit in well with what happened at the start. This is why so many do not like a RAAC.

Cheap ending.

Good story, but he should have divorced her LONG before any of the later story happened.

Loved it, you write great stories!

A very good story, well written, nice happy ending.

Thanks for sharing.

That was a beautiful story. Thank you.

Third time reading this. I'll be back.

I really enjoy revisiting this one

RC cola is still around. At least it is in California.

Oh hell no

2nd read. 1st was years ago and I forgot how long winded and desperately needing emotional connection the author was. Sooooo many tears, I am surprised the characters were not perpetually dehydrated.

I dunno, after reading a bunch of your stories, it’d be out of character NOT to have a type o or two. I’m cool wid ‘em.

Let’s, see… at his point, so many stories, so much popcorn. I’m hankering for a good ol Moon Pie and an R oh C coke cola! Costco sells Moon Pies, but not sure if RC Cola is still in biz. Ah! The mom and pop store equivalent if your back woods town was too small for a Dairy Queen. Sweet. MEM…oh…ries!…

Yup, 10 on the 5 scale. On to the next. I wonder if the next has anything to do with an errant main squeeze? Don t say anything. It’d spoil the surprise.

OK, that wasn't too difficult, right? Just take your time, get your ducks in a row and we can all live happily everafter. A good read that rates a solid five.

And thanks!

Re: Schwanze1

If you don't like it why don't you show us how it should be done, after all you've been here for over 6 years. Oh, wait...Your submissions are a total of "This user does not have any submissions yet." Signed: BTW 06/04/23

Too Halmarky for my tastes but liked it non the less..

Or, he retired to Ecuador and was spoiled and attended to like a king by a young goddess and her whole family who thinks he's the greatest guy in the world. His ex wife spent all her retirement funds searching for him before she found him. He gave her a job as the maid reporting to his young goddess' mother.

A solid story. A few small spelling mistakes, and a few places where it looked like the story was initially 1st person, but hadn't fully had the "I"s edited out. And you didn't do anything with the car thing that Dave was fixing up. Overall, though, I enjoyed it. Solid 4 stars.

Second or third time around for this almost tragedy that turned into a fairytale. Very good writing and many lessons to learn about relationships and marriage. Some of tend to prioritize the wrong things and others of us don't have clue, myself being part of the latter group. 5 stars as usual and a much better ending than some of the other 'Let Go' stories.

So many well written stories on this site about a marriage with two pussies in it.

I like the is author a lot. One of the more talented ones here. But the premises of this story don't work. First, a guy that talented and far-sighted as a major salesman would have gotten a hearing. Most rising executives in such companies began in sales. That a female executive with her talent didn't get that? Nah. Especially if a major client top dog had a high opinion of him and would have said something to her at company parties. Also, a career-focused ambitious executive woman at 36 rising on talent wouldn't change her ways as portrayed here. Just wouldn't happen. Divorce would have been a virtual certainty. I was in the medical industry for many years, and saw such talented women in that industry. Few were married, had families above a certain executive level, and if they had a spouse, he had a totally independent life. Otherwise, you respected them professionally but marry one? As one commenter put it: "WTFD?" I was married to one, but cut her loose for a more loving and domestic nurse for a blissful marriage of 20+ years and two children. Such transformation as depicted here just don't occur i the real world. BUt it's why they call this fiction. And QHML1 does it well.

In summary this caricature of a man was nothing more than a Salesman for his entire Career? Yet supposedly he's highly regarded and highly respected except by himself and his wife obviously because she even refers to him as only a Salesman.

So in short this Guy has zero to no ambition like at all as his wife begins her inexorable rise to the top dickless does nothing but the minimum requirement to keep his job. How do I know well for one thing high performing Salesman don't stay Salesman that's a UNIVERSAL FACT.

And now his marriage supposedly his wife treated him like shit for literally YEARS. And they hadn't had sex for a year or close to it before she even fired him without cause? Like WTFD and what does wonder schlong do fucking nothing he goes all passive aggressive in fact everything he does is just more pathetic than effective.

He doesn't iniate shit his lawyer another controlling woman takes charge. He luckily meets his new boss and instead of going after the hot bosses daughter he wimps out again and hides on his hobby farm. Taking back the cunt wife was about as big a kick in the balls that any reader with a set of balls could possibly take.....welcome to SIMPVILLE

Sorry, wackdoodle, I have never done this before, but I wonder if you read the same story I did.

I have been in a situation where I loved a person and for years I played second fiddle, it hurts terribly, especially when it is ongoing, and you have made efforts to resolve it.

Dave did not push it all the way to court, he resolve the case.

He needed her to wake up by feeling some pain herself, otherwise she would have dictated the terms for the resolution, which would not have happened.

Dave is human and has his flaws, the way the story was written, and characters, resolved, reaching out, had to be done, and Dave felt he had done all he could already .

I am not singling you out to label you, but my first impression was I wondered if you read the entire story.

I have read your other comments, and I mostly agreed with you, I just differ with you on this one.

No way a marriage survives that

I liked the story. What I really disliked was the often showing “I” view when it should have been mostly “He” but also “she” version.

A check over would turn the story much easier readable. Nevertheless 4stars.

SHUT THE HELL UP... You Wanna be English Professors!!!

This Story teaches you everything that our current standards going against..... Being a Good wife and Husband, being a good parent, being a good child. And to the writer, you know how to use the Pen, Do not put it down.

Poor choice of editors. Yet a very lovely story! Cheers!

Apparently your editors can't distinguish between 1st and 3rd person conversations, makes it very difficult to read. Otherwise, meh

The story got a little confusing in places regarding time and perspectives, and needed some basic editing. On the other hand, I spent a lot of time tearing up and crying while reading this. You're an excellent writer, you just need an editor to clean it up. Thanks.

Nice story. Pronouns...in one paragraph there would be both I and he

But again, nice story

Overall good

Won't nit pick

Except one.

High position and only two weeks vacation

Some executives don't take it all But get a lot more than that.

Good ones as Sol learn to delegate and take off when they want.

So the story idea was great, but your concept of time not so great. Things that should have taken weeks take minutes or days in the context of your story. You've got him in one week. He's went from being fit to having a beer belly and then he spends less than a week. Or you don't give a time frame for how long it takes for him to get in shape. But then when he finally meets his wife again, it's only been 10 weeks. The work on the house would have taken the months not weeks and then the wife and him but both work for the company for 8 years. She went from a low level management position to CEO in 8 years and he was a salesman that's supposedly was well known enough that all sales people in his line of sales with know him, but yet not good enough to receive not even one promotion in his whole eight careers or even enough to warrant the company. Looking at a reason why his sales would have dropped all things that would have not what make the story. Unbelievable and it all these other salesmen would have known him and his reputation. It wouldn't matter the reason he got fired. He would have been snatched up in a heartbeat by other competitors I'm not saying that the story was bad. I'm just saying that some of those items could have been addressed which would have made the story better than what it was

Loved it, thank you

Schwanze1, "Has anyone written a version where she dies alone as an old cat lady?"

That, I would read.

Wife's too much of a twat for a reconciliation.

No matter how complex you make this, it is still just a cuck story.

This is no story of redemption but of manipulation. He simped all the eay to the end. There was no equality or submission. Just more of the same. Glad these people are made up and no one actually got hurt 🤣

Glad Bev got over thinking she was too old to have a baybay.

Good story of them turning it around. The drip of information about background plotting was 95% to 98% of what would be perfect, you did really well on that. In fact, it could be perfect, and I am just not expert enough to know.

More sex.

Five for you

Why does she think 36 is too old to bear children? WTF?

Has anyone written a version where she dies alone as an old cat lady?

I can't believe he actually forgived her WTF

Just a great story, of redemption. Thank you.

Loved the story - hated the ending wherein he took her back.

Her transition was not overly realistic, but I enjoyed the story enough to accept it. The rambling at the end hurt the story a bit, as it seemed like you just felt compelled to close things out after your passion for the story had already ended and the writing quality was much lower.

Good story, and glad it fit the actual theme of Loving Wives!

I read to the end because I loved the characters, and the story progression. However, I am also in the crowd that feel the numerous grammar issues hurt readability. E.g. Often switched pronouns from "her" or "his" to "my" in the same sentence. This is an easy fix, so don't feel bad. I know this is a site with free stories and don't expect perfection - I am actually giving this feedback BECAUSE I WANT YOU TO WRITE MORE and get better. I want you to succeed and I personally believe you can exceed the lower expectations set by others on the site.

Things you already do better than most on this site: 1) You have believable and likable characters. 2) You have a realistic/plausible plot. 3) You engage readers enough to create an emotional reaction.

This could be a treatment for expanding into a decent novel. This was a breath of fresh air in this site, honestly.

My goodness what a lot of distressed BTBs, grammarians and language experts who feel they should be getting far far more from a free story on a free website.

You get what you pay for guys!

I've learned to ignore the spelling and grammar errors and just enjoy the stories on this web site. This stuff is free. Why complain? Five stars for a great story with a few typos (BFD).

I liked the happy ending. Good story.

My goodness, the pronoun trouble...

I read this story before, and liked it despite the flipping perspectives, first and third person, and other unforced errors.

This time, they are too great a distraction to enjoyable reading. I bailed out on the second page. Three stars. JPB

The rather cavalier manner in which Beverly and later Amanda suddenly make unilateral decisions to stop their birth control and wait until they are pregnant (or likely to be) before informing their husbands is troubling. When husband and wife live and respect each other, is not parenthood something that should be a jointly made decision? If it is made by the wife alone, it seems clear that either the love or the respect, or perhaps both, is missing in action.