All Comments on 'Let Go'

Why the changes back and forth from third person to first person, Within the same paragraph even, on pages three and four and so on? If you need to, get an editor or a proofreader or something. It's really distracting. As well as bringing up parts for a car that never went anywhere, and way too rushed of a reconconciliation - made it very unrealistic.

Great writing ability but again, forget that bitch. Never again.

The only thing that I feel disquiet about is the grandfather. Yep—I am pretty certain that the story looks different from his perspective; I wonder if he was really drinking? I wonder if he was, did that coincide with the process of the radical absorption of his family into another family that used his grand-daughters to mediate their own dysfunction? There is a dark underbelly to this story—the ruthlessness of competitive business practice turned on others in the service or name of a “higher purpose”?

Great story ! I've read it about 4x now and will probably come back to it from time to time.

This is such a well written story with characters that are so authentic that I would have thought this was something that actually occurred and was being retold by a friend. The problem I had with this was when Beverly was meeting with “The Board”, she started to cry multiple times. How many men do you know who are the CEO and would cry during a meeting with their board members let alone anyone else? They just accept it and give her tissues and time to collect herself which I find to be disgusting since it is clearly acceptable sexism. If it were a man then he would be either fired or told to “suck it up” or to “man up” which is common with most males from the age of about five years old when they are clearly taught that men don’t cry and have that drilled into them their entire lives. It makes the story more authentic since I have seen this happen in real life twice in sales and once in management and it was uncomfortable and even worse when I watched a salesman come back to the office and broke down in tears he was belittled and told to go home with nobody asking him what was the problem. If they had bothered to ask they would have found out that he was given 4 months to live as he had a brain tumor that was inoperable and still growing. I was one of his closest friends and I walked into work the next day and raised hell before I quit but at least I got to tell the CEO what kind of bullshit this was and that my friend was going to sue on grounds of discrimination and sexism. Sadly he blew his head off 2 nights later after thanking me for standing up for him and being the best friend he ever had. I still cry about this and have nightmares thinking about how his life ended and the betrayal he got from a company he worked at for 12 years. 5 stars

One thing I have learned of property in Greece (including Crete) is that although you may buy the land, you may not automatically also buy the trees.

If you subsequently buy the trees you may not, automatically, buy any fruits those trees bear.

Good premise and story. Way too much crying though. It seemed like the key characters were crying every hour of every day.

My ex pulled something like this, which is one reason I divorced her. At a time when over 70,000 electronics experts had been “downsized” by GE, Toshiba and Panasonic, electronics jobs were not to be had. I was offered a teaching position at a school my wife was principal of. She nixed the job because she wanted me to wait for a higher paying electronics job. She was too stupid to understand there were NO electronics jobs available because so many of us were out of work. So rather than have her husband feel like a man and still bring in a paycheck, she belittled annd humiliated him and made him stay out of work for over 12 months. Ironically, I had turned down the principal job in favor of her so that she could gain the experience since she was the actual teacher.

Any woman who would dismiss her husband's opinions and desires for years. then callously fire him, is'thoing to north into a sensitive loving wife after a magical reconciliation. and a little counseling. He should have moved out the day she fired him, and inflicted maximum financial and professional damage on her for the wrongful termination, then divorced her ass with the biggest pitbull lawyer he can get, then never speak other again. I've had three female bosses two were incompetent bitches who acted like tough bosses to cover their own insecurities. The third boss was ok, so I'm not saying all women cant be good managers. Beverly acted as a Tough driven CEO, how does she turn that off at home? His firing was his escape hatch, and he blew it. Dumb SOB.

Adorei a história. Novamente. Mas uma dúvida subsiste: o que aconteceu às peças do carro que ela lhe ía dar quando o visitou pela primeira vez na casa nova?

Old bitch writer wrote Dave like a fucking desperate wimp.

Asshole husband was too easy on the bitch wife. Fucking WIMP

To the anon from 5 days ago: You're an idiot.

Please fix the pronoun errors. Things were kind of confusing. Otherwise a good tale.

🤦‍♂️

I liked the beginning then it made a weird turn and continued to a story that seems thrown out without any planning of a good ending. If you find your story going off in the wrong direction stop writing. Come back to it after some reflection. This story went off course and stayed there.

[28.02.24]

Que Romantique!

11/10!!!!!

Or:

...by the time she got home he had moved all his shit out to storage except for what he would need short term. Then he pulled everything he could get out of their funds, which turned out to be plenty to live the rest of his life comfortably in Ecuador making babies with two hot little senorita twins he found about six months into his new life. He wanted to choose one but they insisted they shared everything and as it turned out decades later, they did, treating him like a king till the day he passed on with his grandchildren, children and wives around the bed.

Loved it

Thanks for making my day brighter!

This is an engaging story, and the interplay of hurt, revenge and reconciliation adds to the enjoyment. There are a few typos spread through it and in some segments there is a disconcerting change of voice in some paragraphs.

Thank you for the good read.

It is a Hallmark story, and I liked it. I defer to Vorpal2's comments and suggestions.

I guess I was in the mood for a 'Hallmark' movie, so cried in all the right places - That said, syntax is awful, gender/spelling/'who's commenting, etc. are often a jumble. Clean it up and it will be a sweet, if a bit predictable story, but I'm not really complaining - please consider it encouragement to continue and polish - someone smart said, correctly, 'editing is writing' (or perhaps it was the other way around) remains true. Best wishes. h

Well written, crap story line. The main character started with a backbone and integrity. By the end of the story he had given both of them away. Divorce was the only reasonable answer and he needs to drop Sal's wife as a friend.

First YOU are one of my favorite writers .... period!!!

Having said that this "RAAC" story was completely WRONG! Taking her back, no matter how you tried to portray this selfish, egoistical, narcissistic BITCH is NEITHER justified or deserved! This story is literally the definition of "putting lipstick on a PIG!

For the first time one of your stories got what it deserved .... a "1"!!!

Don't do drugs .... they can lead to "brain farts" like this submission.

Better luck next time!

Seriously this fucking simp offing himself would be a better result than fucking taking this bitch back 😂

I’ve loved all of your stories but this one. There’s no way this would really happen except in fiction. I find it hard to believe that any man would ever get back with a woman who did that to him. Firing him was just the icing on the cake of his life with her. Nuff said. LM

Thank you. A sweet story.

One of the best stories I have found on Literotica. While some have pointed out grammatical issues, I found myself so immersed in the story that I failed to notice them. Thus my inability to be a proof reader is shown.

Great story. Although I do agree with Dicksnugfit. Grammatical errors do interrupt the immersion and are irritating. Like writing I and me instead of him or his. It shouldn't take much time to spell check your story imo.

Wow. great story. Sort of a brutal abrupt way to end the otherwise entertaining story. Still gave it 5 stars

Отличная история! Правда слишком быстро помирились, на мой взгляд, конечно... И удивляет, что текст просто обрывается

Great story, but one weakness is the unclear usage of she and her, never making it clear who was speaking. In stories like this, you have to sprinkles some names in. (eg, she went to see her should be Sally went to see Jill, etc.)

Just a recommendation to help the reader...

JPB

I am a bit of a grammar Nazi, so the frequent mixing of pronouns ('They took 'my' time getting there', as opposed to 'their' time), missing words ('He patted dog' not 'the dog'.) and using 'you' as a possessive pronoun ('I'll take you car', not 'your' car'.) frustrate me as I feel like they are letting down your(!) otherwise excellent English. This is a well constructed, totally believable and beautifully crafted, life affirming tale. I have lost track of how many times I have read this story and I enjoy it every time. Thank you for your time, dedication and for sharing your talent with us.

Crater7527

Still on page two. Generally well written, but the occasional slips into first person are jarring. Needs a final proofreading before resubmission.

JPB

We miss you

Was a lovely story at times things get so dark but then You see the light , I enjoyed each page , it was great to see how nice things ended up or everyone

Excellent Story, and didn’t even need to be erotic to keep me reading

I'ma sucker for happy stories like this. My life of 53 years married is one of them. I've been fortunate, 2 great kids with thier own great families and I would like eveyone to have the same good fortune. No infidelity here just lifes prolems that will be overcome with perserverance and love.

Oh, still one of my all-time favorites! It must be only me but when I read, I read over stuff. It doesn't matter! Yes I noticed errors so it still is a 5! DerMtMan

It is NOT hypercritical for readers to point out typos/glitches/spelling/grammar or other errors to authors so that they can be quickly remedied, in order to make their stories more easily readable and understandable with a lot less effort. It is much better for all concerned if comprehension and the story flow can be improved, without unduly overtaxing readers whatever their own individual gender, birthplace, race, nationality, colour, creed, class, culture, political-persuasion or financial situation.

So it's NOT entirely "Nit-Picking" when readers point out acute errors that can make one wince, eg:-

"He once told Susan she was the smart aunt he'd wished he had when I was growing up."

as such glitches DO interrupt the seamless reading experience, and jolt his/her mind with a "Duh"? dropping them out of their attention trance for the necessary seconds to decipher and translate this! Too much time-out, can, and in some cases WILL, cause a reader here and there, to DROP that particular story altogether OR to downgrade their score of it, so any timely revisions could improve the Author's overall score rankings, and volume of favouriting. Please remember that some of these stories remain active for decades, so updating is always relevant.

I first read this story some years ago, and re-reading it now am STILL of the self-same opinion that this is a very powerful story, pitifully unchecked and grossly unedited, so full of glitches, typos and grammatical errors as to severely reduce it's readability! Potentially ten stars out of five, but in it's current grammatical state, 2.7 out of 5!

This is the third time I have read this, and I still want to know-what kind of car was he going to restore, what happened to it, and what did he do when the wreck Bev bought showed up ?? Seriously, I have always loved this story. Syrupy sweet and schmaltzy. Thank you again for writing it. The Bear loved it. 6 stars.

The BEAR

It was a pretty good story up until the end. I didn't like the fact that Bev really never sacrificed anything in order to be with her husband - like, I remain unconvinced that all of the problems that led to them almost breaking up were really addressed. Also, I didn't like the adoption subplot that much, it was weird and just unnecessary filler. Especially since if I recall correctly, Bev is only 36 - it's a bit on the older side to have kids, but it's still reasonably in the safe zone, especially with genetic screening and IVF - which is something a loaded CEO should absolutely have access to - anyway, they had a child eventually so why did you think they needed to have that adoption subplot first? It was weird. Personally, I think you could have made Bev a lot more sympathetic if starting a family with Dave was seen as her committing to her relationship with him and detaching some from work. She could even had said something sappy like, "Dave, I swear I am going to put our child and you ahead of the entire world." - There you go, Bev instantly becomes a lot more likeable and it makes sense because of the influence of Sol and Susan on their relationship.

Or he found a sweet young latina with a young child whose husband had died in the sandbox.After his divorce, he saved her and she saved him adoring him treating him like a king the rest of his life while he did his best to treat her even better. He rarely thought of his ex wife and when he did he was amazed by how good it was to be treated like a man by a wonderful woman.

Can't win when you are a writer - readers like it or don't; story is to short or too long; etc. Q is my favorite writer, I've read nearly everything - multiple times, this story is no exception. With 800 mostly positive comments I must not be alone. 5 stars.

somewhere east of Omaha

While a little on the long side for a single story, it was well worth it. I haven’t read any of your other stories, but I f you do something this long again I would recommend breaking it into parts.

The story was excellent, and definitely ahead of its time as far as work/personal life balance. The only thing I noticed was that you seemed to slip into first person (me,my, I) on occasion. Other than that, 5 stars.

I usually don't bother with stories this long, but I have to admit I got hooked early. Great character progression, redemption and reconciliation!

Good tale, Five Stars.

i thought it was a pretty good story...Cinco Estrellas!

Wow, this is such a nice story. And I'm glad that it ended like this. With them getting back together plus adopting the 2 sisters. I shed a couple of tears reading this.

I think that you missed your calling. The author should have written Hallmark specials, or lifetime for women...

That being said, it was positive and uplifting. But real life, is not so clean. I don’t think wifey would have changed her spots. She had an alpha personality, and I don’t see it ending anytime soon. The husband was more laid back, but he wanted and needed social interaction, so why would he put himself back in a situation with a ball cracking bitch? The two if them were mismatched. And the humiliation he suffered by her firing and publicly demeaning him, would have been the end of the relationship for any sane man. Sorry, to burst the bubble...

I think this was my third or even fourth time reading this story. Still had me angry at times, smiling like a loon a paragraph or two later, and trying to read with happy tears a few after that. To me, that's the kind of story that we need more of in Loving Wives. Sure, we all like the BtB (m/f/o) stories, but sometimes you just need something like this: the comfy blanket, hot cocoa and a hug from a big ol' teddy bear. Pure Hallmark. Perfect for this time of year (2023-12-18)

Great job !

Pretty good, the changes in pov were a bit distracting, and I kinda zined out/glossed over the church rubbish. But, solid work.

Great.

Great.

Read again. From an older perspective, this story really did get the business side right. Note to young couples, never work for the same company unless it is your company. First part, she seemed like something of a narcissist. Apparently she wasn't, judging by the rest of the story, since a narcissist could never do what she did. I've raised my score for this story. A lot. Really was a helluva story. Were I the husband, the second half would never have happened. Too much Scotch Irish Norse in me. I would have been LONG gone when she got home from work day one. But that's perhaps not to my credit.

On a scale of one to ten, this is a twenty!!

There were ALOT of grammar problems in this story. You kept saying I or me whenever a character was thinking or something was happening.

But it was fine nonetheless. It even brought a tear to my eye a few times.

My third or fourth time on this one, and it always brings tears to my eyes. Trials and tribulations haunt us thru our passage thru this life. Hopefully they balance out. All decisions have consequences and as we get older some of those decisions were regretful and others were good. This story brought all that out and MC couple fought hard to get back to where they should have been. Sometimes we learn too late about what's important as this story points out. Is it just a fairy tale or part of reality? 10 stars if I had them!

4th time reading and still 1 of my all-time favorites!

Great story, best of the many versions of this tale. Q can tell a story with the best of all LW writers.

Great Story!! Loved it!!

I have to admit that this is one of my favorite stories. However, one of the things that stick in my craw is how she violated both company policy and good management by firing him against policy. For a CEO? Not ever happening. Too much experience climbing the ladder.

I realize that this type of Let Go story demands a bad business decision in firing the hubby. But every one has the same flaw of violating policy in the terminations.

I have read this story enough times that I will not read further this time and go looking for something more interesting.

JPB

Page two. The flipping POVs is very disconcerting.

JPB

After several readings I can honestly say that I love your take on this story.

But what the fuck is an "age appropriate group" when it comes to religion?

I was in the corporate world for over 40 years and saw this occur many times sad to say. Both women and men basically gave their spouses away chasing not the almighty dollar but power. An old exec friend of mine who was my mentor said to me early in my career take care of your family and friends, watch those who don't go from he is here to who is he. I never forgot that lesson.

I enjoyed reading this heart wrenching, heart warming, story of human failings and recovery. Thanks and five stars for sharing your talent.

I get hacked off when people complain about grammar, punctuation, spelling and most any thing else. Academics don't live in the real word just in print. A lot of people with hidden disabilities would read straight though this with no trouble. Where as if it was written in academic style they would have great difficulty reading it. I read this with no issue so it says a lot about me.

Boy, wish I could edit this story, for all the perspective changes in middle of the sentence. Very annoying to have to parse a sentence when reading. On a more enjoyable note, I've read this story 4 or 5 times, and thoroughly enjoy. 5 stars from me, just to keep consistency.

It started off good then became a jumbled mess. Not surprising since the majority of the Literotica writers seem to fail a storytelling.

Nice. A little American excessive indulgence.

@RePhil:

What was the writer thinking?

Bumper covers are a recent model car thing, classic cars have real bumpers.

Reread. Hey Whatever happened to the bumper cover?????!

Love the story and the plot. The several instances of changing perspective in the middle of a sentence sets my teeth grinding, though. Wish you'd edit it and resubmit?

This wonderful story should be on the silver screen or at least a good hallmark tale. It moved me in a way none of these other tales have. You put feeling and raw emotion in a way that few can. Keep up your great work.

I come back to this periodically because qhml1 is one of the best authors on the site, and I keep hoping I'll catch something I missed. Sadly, hasn't happened again. This female lead was written with absolutely no redeeming qualities, and never experienced any self-awareness. No reason on earth, except maybe laziness, the male lead should roll over and go back to beingabused.

I lost count of how many times I have come back to this story and every time it’s as emotionally draining as the first but in a good way. There are some stories that just resonate with me and this definitely makes that list. I wish there were more stories that felt like this to me but then I guess these few wouldn’t feel so incredibly special.

I can’t help but wonder how many of these positive comments would be different if the CEO was male and the victim was female. There was no growth in Beverly’s character. What did she give up to prove she was worthy of his trust? The whole excuse for Dave and her getting back together was weak. The older sister was an adult and would have been granted custody of the younger one with or without Beverly.

And still one of my favorites, makes me feel good and tear up all at once. Good work, Thanks.

This was a great story, well-written, with well-developed characters, and was a reconciliation story which is rare here on Literotica. As I read this story I looked back on our marriage and my traveling to Las Vegas six times a year for week-long visits as different shows required my attendance. I could see that, at times, I lost sight of the main goal which was my wife and our two children. We made it through these tough times and are now blessed with two lovely daughters-in-law and four grandchildren. We are very thankful and see this story as a cautionary tale for many career-oriented couples out there. Five stars, for sure

Man, I thought this story would never end! The author had a really good thing going but couldn’t figure out how to get off stage.

Another thing, every chairman of the board loves it when his CEO of a struggling division breaks down and cries at every turn. It’s a real confidence booster. Still AA good read 4*

Didn’t she buy a front bumper for a car he was restoring

I initially disliked the mega-bitch CEO, but then I couldn't help but like her and wanted her to succeed. She simply had lost her way and, once she realised what was truly important to her, she fought tooth and nail to get it back. A great journey. And rather believable, too.

At the end it all came rushing forward with those advancing snapshots of their lives. It was kind of overwhelming. Many tears of joy were shed. :) So glad everything worked out for them in the end. It very nearly didn't.

This IS one of my favorites, and I love it. Between the plot twists, and the parts where my eyes were leaking (page 7&8). It's also so well written, that it's believable (could happen in real life). Make no mistake Q can tell a story. :-)

superb story . i used to read it repeatedly.

If I were Dave I wouldn't have been so forgiving (if at all). However in saying that this is still a well written story and worthy of five stars....

Life is always better rich.

Great story, would be a great Hallmark TV movie. Only thing what happened to the car he was restoring and Bev bought the wreak?

Thanks for sharing an enjoyable story

I have always loved this story. 5 stars, the Bear always approves of it. But I've often wondered- what kind of car was it, and what happened to it?? It had to have been a Mustang, right?? Please tell me it was a Mustang. I'll read it again, soon.

The BEAR

Could someone please post a link to the "M Moreau's "Jill Rodgers and Donald Young"" [CEO fired husband] story? Referenced about 25 comments earlier. I've looked everywhere and can't find it!

Matt Moreau . He doesnt seem to be posting here. I found him on a Canadian site of Stories Online

To the Author: nicely done I will read on

Loved it absolutely great story,⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Brilliant story and well worth a 5 star. Good people who got lost and found their way back.

Could someone please post a link to the "M Moreau's "Jill Rodgers and Donald Young"" [CEO fired husband] story? Referenced about 25 comments earlier. I've looked everywhere and can't find it!

Read again. Helluva story but nauseating at the same time given I identify with the husband. I really think if my wife did that to me I'd have been packed and gone with all the cash before she got home.

One of my all time favorites. Read once or twice a year.

I liked the story, but the perspective changes were jarring as hell. You can't switch from first to second person in one sentence and still be talking about the same person!

I enjoyed the story it had a good ending. One thing I did notice was that Dave never found out or Bev never mentioned her date and kiss with Bob after she had fired Dave.

Brilliant! I’m getting soft in my old age. Loved how the love story developed later – how everything worked out for them like a Mills and Boon Novel 5 – Stars!

Love it!

Well 1 you need a editor or a better editor at least there was a lot of typos and errors in this story as the story goes it self I can see the point of view from both sides I see her side of things as a former retired business owner myself you do have to do what you feel is best for the company I also see he side of things as well the way she went about firing him was the wrong the way as it went against company policy was he right in going after them for wrongful termination if that was the only reason then yes however it was stated and led to believe that was not the only reason so with that being said no he wasn't while I get there was underlying problems within there marriage to start with he was in the wrong for allowing the event that took place in business part of there life's to determine what took place in their personal life those 2 things should always be kept separate they never mix not even if both parties work together unless both have the same position and pay or both own the business 50/50 however they didn't have those things again i see both sides i have to agree with both views equally when I started my business i didn't have that issue to start with cause i was single when I got married i learned quickly to leave work at work not bring it home then after being married to my wife for like 6 years I signed 50 percent of the business to her that was 17 years ago now in case of a divorce she can get only the worth of half the business which sold for a million so half of that she still works part time for the people that bought us out doing there pay roll and taxes