by TonyMesker
Though your ending is good, two or three more chapters might get better comments. Like they discover they are both based in Cleveland, so their love affair begins. He travel a lot, and she is gone a lot, will it work? Keep writing.
XYZ
It lacked a reasonable build-up between them from being in the room and her dropping her robe.
Too much like a porn movie, all action - no plot.
the biggest cock the bitch has ever seen,,, and it gets bigger every time she sees it right
I have seen you big beautiful cock fifty million times and each time its bigger than last time
Yeah right ,, same old same old SHITTTTTTTTTTTT
agree with previous comment. LIttle more seduction before that robe opened. Otherwise nice and sexy
I pretty much loved the concept, although the way she opened up her robe so early was a bit awkward. The ending was incredible. Some more erotic content and patience before starting the sex would help. Still it is a really good effort. :)