All Comments on 'Libertine Adventures Ch. 01'

I am in need of chpter 2. Very well so far

I really enjoyed your story. I am looking forward to future chapters, perhaps including her twin joining the fun.

I though it was well written, sorry about the mother having passed away through, but I guess different people handle grief in different ways but I am not sure I would follow in my mothers ways, but that is just my opinion and I was turned off by the spanking part, but at least it was not too long and hopefully there is no more of it

I think maybe English is a second language for you. Your story is great but it's spoilt by incorrect English and poor grammar, yet regardless of this the story is very well told ... I especially like your character development.

I have taught English as a second language; so may I suggest that you find someone on the Literotica Site to edit any other stories for you.

Apologies about the four stars I awarded them before understanding your troubles with English as a second language.

Thank you for the feedback!

Indeed english is a second language for me, please do not apologise for the 4 stars, if the text has mistakes it is what it deserves :p

This being said, I would love to learn more about proper writing, i usually am into scientific papers so it's not a good place to learn how to write more litterary english ^^

I will gladly take any advice you might have!