All Comments on 'License to Strip'

Keep an eye on my "Hedonist" story. I haven't written that bit just yet, but I do sense that it's heading that way. It's an angle I've wanted to explore in my writing.

(I'm a little less sure that I want to explore it with my guy in real life, but I'm willing to explore it here in our minds.)

B

Next time he'll get it straight from the fountain, I hope.

But that's what this story is about. Everyone involved takes one for the team, if you will.

Such is love. ;)

B

I loved the protagonist's description of why she likes to strip. Very sexy and very sweet. Not too thrilled about her deciding to swallow (I wouldn't), but her giving him a blowjob in front of the other guy was hot. Well done. :D

I will go have a peek :)

Thanks for your very kind words.

B

I'm new to this site and to writing for it. Resolved to read a few rivals and comment. This story is sexy to me because it admits the thrill of female exhibitionism. I love ladies who strip for the camera, or for the imagination, and I love to hear about it. On top of that, a well done tale - convincing and briskly told. Please check mine. Regards ...

I think of these as the same characters from the "Hedonist" stories. There is one tiny plot detail that overlaps (the first and only other time she swallowed for him). But this story might violate their chronology. I think of her as older than late 30s in "Hedonist," but I think I said there (as here) that they'd been together 7 years.

I do have more "Hedonist" under construction, trying to bend it through a new genre (or two), but I haven't worked on it now for at least a few days (mostly in order to get this thing written).

B (parenthetically)

Reading your prose is like making love -- foreplay, peaks and valleys building to a crescendo and ultimate satisfaction. I like the depth of character development, the insights that solidify motivations and deft execution of the plot. As always, your tale is believable and smacks of reality (although the only jolt there is his willingness to swallow a stranger's semen; but I'll bow to literary license for plot necessity -- and you did nicely allow that he was in the heat of passion, well wanting to cum, when he did it). I liked this young lady and would be most pleased to spend more time with her if you'd be so kind. Thanks, Brandie69, for another beautiful story.

You are most considerate :)

B

Great storytelling. I loved the build-up, and the insides into what turns you on. A very interesting twist at the end - loved the confliction the character faced and your ability to manipulate his arousal to get what you wanted.

Fantastic.

That's especially nice to hear from a fellow author!

I should add that these two particular characters may do a three- way someday, but it will take them much more than one summer cookout to get there :)

Thanks again!

B

Great story Brandie. I expected a threesome of course, and it sort of was while not being, which made it much more exciting and realistic. Wonderful buildup and character interaction. Thank you!

Yes, I did have a touch of verisimilitude once, after traveling abroad.

Nothing a little penicillin couldn't take care of! ;)

B

Brandie69 - your stories have that touch of verisimilitude. It reminds of various occasions when I ... well perhaps I won't go there. Nice story. I liked the way you turned the tables on your boyfriend.