All Comments on 'Licentious Behaviour'

Nice story. You need to continue this story. You have done an excellent jod in chatacter develipment but you just begun. There is more to these two you need to explore.

Also, more detail wilh their sexual relationship. This is afterall erotica 😁

I predict a sea change in this relationship. Enjoyed this frothy taboo deep dive!

Ergo the obvious score

Full marks *****

Good idea for the story, but I would suggest an editor to smooth out the flow of the story. The dialogue felt stunted, which makes it hard to read.

Thanks Egmont, have followed you for years and you are still churning out fabulous stories, take no notice of the guy who said you need an editor, he doesn't understand Australian dialect. Keep them coming please

Was this written by a 12 yr old?

I have been a reader on this site for more than ten years and, given my my Bachelor degree minor was English Literature, I have been able to discern the the authors were from the UK within the first page. Unfortunately, I was unable to continue past the third paragraph. I could not push myself beyond that. Mechanical, no discernible writing style and in dire need of an editor. In spite of the number of submissions, please remember the ild adage, “Quality far exceeds quantity and requires little effort, but due diligence.” 1* and inly because you added sydpense by revealing nothing of who you ste

It started well but it went downhill and ended with him insulting his mother's breast.