by HLD
“Living not to get hurt is like dying without knowing that you're already dead."
…and that, friends, is simply great writing. An incisive thought effectively and aptly expressed. Strunk and White would approve. (“Omit needless words!”)
I read this several times a couple years ago. Parts are very familiar and a lot seem new. Going to Act 02 now!
Baton Rouge, LA Cajun Guy
this story is so well written. and it is interesting that of the two, Bailey is the most mature.
As usual you make them part of my family
Thanks;
DKP
I'd love to see a longer series of this story. Can't wait to get into the other chapters.
Scale
I usually lurk, but this story is completely fantastic!! A definite must read. Hot, sexy, funny and cute along with an actual plot and great writing skills. Read the three Acts, you'll thank HLD, believe me! Can't wait to make my way through all this author's other fics.
xxo
Scarlet Butler ;-)
(like I said, read all 3!!)
it's a great story! I'm lost for words to even describe how much i love this story! :)
I read the whole series [as well as several of your other stories] and enjoyed them enough to hunt them down [since I forgot to bookmark them] to re-read this. [I also really enjoyed "Impersonating Brianne" and "Check "Yes" or "No" ".] Not a lot of sex in them, but good enough not to need it. It seems you've quit writing, which is too bad. Hope you have opportunity and interest in writing more in the future. BTW, I also enjoy the fact that you have your grammar under control. :-D
Very good, great ending. This could morph into more. I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing with us.
Seriously this is wonderful and IMHO too good to be on literotic. You are a talented writer and should seriously consider contacting erotic publishers. I don't know if you are professional or not but I am in awe of your talent. The characters are lovable and genuinely romantic. Even the secondary characters are well written. This is very sensual without being sleazy and Gabe really is a prince charming.
This really should be in the romance category. Thanks for the great story!
The story is slow and sweet, building momentum slowly and the suspense makes everything sweeter!
Your skill is impressive and your technical knowledge is
at an excellent level. I hope that you keep writing for us
in the future.
with your writing! You truly are an amazing writer! Your stories aren't porn, they really fit into the erotic story category! You tell such a great story & focus on all the intricacies that go together to make up these wonderful characters! I was soo glad that I read this at a time where I did not have to wait for the next chapter!
I really like the smooth way your writing flows. I like the realistic scenes and dialogue. I like how you're allowing the main characters to take things slow. I like how all the characters and actions come across as real - from friends, siblings, parents, etc.
I loved this story and eagerly await the next installment. Thank you!
Thank you for sharing your talent with us. I got hooked on this story and re-read it immediately. Also, many thanks to michchick for her editing skills. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
but I'll say it again, Dave. I absolutely love this story! Thanks for the opportunity to edit!
Told with finesse and class - VERY well done!!! Cant wait for the next instalment.
Well HLD you really know how to tell a story!Of course there needs to be a sequalin which they are finally married and she looses her virginity on her wedding night. Obviously that has to happen pretty soon as I don't think either of them can wait too long! Now I have to see what else you have written! Santa