All Comments on 'Life, Sex & All That Ch. 06'

What was the point of writing this? It covers exactly the same ground as the last part. It doesn't advance the story the slightest. Was it just to tell us about a TV show?

I really like this story and I like the way it is developing. I like having the first person narrative uninterrupted by the other party's perspective. My suggestion is that you combine both perspectives in one chapter. I think it will help continuity, allow you to eliminate duplicative details, and move the story quicker to resultion. Whatever you do, don't stop now!

Wherever 'there' is!

We are floundering in a sea of stupid woman deriding a man she 'says' she loves.

Let him get rid of her and start again with a loving woman.

like a soufle - falling flat. susan is not being very graceful in her words/actions and he, how does he really overcome the built up tension?

Flat as Kansas., and about as interesting.