All Comments on 'L'il Sis Ch. 04'

hey ive never commented on a story before, i was getting over the first 3 stories even though it was good "foreplay" but this story was awesome, keep it going like this.

Please continue

Please continue.

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you have so good story here and keep it up please....but there is really no need for you to use word "fuck" in conversations between two of them.....maybe every now and then but not in every sentence it makes it stupid looking...good read anyway

WHEN YOU STARTED THIS STORY, YOU WERE THE SLOWEST WRITER EVER. AND I MAY HAVE JUMPED THE GUN, TELLING YOU TO GIVE IT UP. YOU CAME BACK LIKE SPEED RACER. NOW THIS IS THE WAY A STORY SHOULD GO. IF YOU KEEP UP THIS WAY I'LL BE A FAN AND TELL ALL YOU ARE NOW A WRITER. AGAIN I'AM SORRY. THE OLD MAN

i loved every minute of it, more please like u said espicialy when u bring kat into the mix.thank u and keep it coming

This story has so much room to grow. Please keep writing... also I think you should wait till their relationship develops a bit before exposing them like the cliffhanger suggests. Just a thought.

I loved it cant wait for the next installment please

Could not be better-excelent

Course i want more .PLEASE

"Oh my fuck! "Was all I said well, I um, "enjoyed" the story. I also read all the others and just loved em, Really just top shelf stuff.

Yes, Please keep this going

That was awesome PLEASE bring on more

Good story, well written. Please continue it you would. Don't leave us in suspense.

The previous chapters started off slowly, but it is definitely getting very interesting - please continue!!

By all means continue - since Ally likes anal play, maybe brother can get an even bigger bonus - her sweet ass. Or perhaps Katie might have plans of her own. But then again, Dad coming in at 6:00am might put a wrench in the works. Keep going and let us see where you take us.

1. we need some more

2. is Ally on the pill?

3. is daddy going to discover them together?

Please continue!

Please continue but only suggestion when your describing how many minutes they were at something don't make it seven minutes every time, makes it a bit too repetitive. But all in all this is an excellent story

The introduction of real action is certainly a welcome addition but I feel like the editing took a nose dive. Some comments from previous stories noted the editing needed improvement, but those stories were far and away better written. Early in this chapter the writing is very stiff, and the flipping back and forth between past and present tense is a big negative for me. Overall I like the series a lot, but this is just some food for thought.

Loving this series. Thought the first few were a bit slow but this story has picked up the pace. I don't think their parents should find out what's happening yet but maybe incorporate that into a future story with Kate.

I think it be hot if she was not on pill but save on that i dont think their dad should find out yet but doing her friend in be great but sstill have them do one on one time you are a great writer

hope you keep this series going

I'm pretty much checking literotica daily to see more chapters, so please continue this story.

YES! please continue this series! I have been checking almost daily!

when it comes to incest it HAS to be THE FEWER THE BETTER. if you add outsiders it is to easy for one of them to get hurt or mad and tell on the others ruining it for the siblings. adding the parents is always a total turn off. always remember " KISS- KEEP IT SIMPLE STUPID "

I love this story please continue it Can't wait for Katie

I really, REALLY loved this story. But I think the story would be better if parents don't find out (but there could be some close calls) and Katie ends up excluded somewhat anyway, I would love to see the story with Ally and Ryan continuing to have each other and the most fulfilling end for me would be for them to end up together...first staying together in college and then...after some smart moves and and clever actions they stay together and ride into the sunset very much in love.

this fucking amazing add more and continue!!!

This story exhibited the sensitivity, love and sensuality that I enjoy. Keep up the good work and continue writting chapters. By all means include Katie with her big boobs. Perhaps there is a threesome in the future.

Also, this is just a suggestion, think about the possibility of a pregnancy since he riding them bare back. I am NOT advocating abortion but watching Ally grow and body change during her pregnancy, carrying to term and putting up for adoption. Ally may be going to school out of town at that time, with the parents not knowing, etc. Again, just a suggestion.

Dont add the dad or anyone, keep it at just them

Great action finally !

Please add Katie scene the next weekend, and more one on one and close calls being caught, have them end up living together and crossing from lust to love... so many places to go, please continue! Great writing... Loved it! MORE I BEG!

Nevermind my previous plea for more. Just found the whole series, looking forward to the rest of the chapters! Hope they deliver some things I imagined and were as good as ch 04.... Keep it up! Looks like you haven't posted in a few years. Either way thanks for these contributions. Really hot!

I actually liked the pace of the story. You have really built the scene though not rushing the relationship between the two making the build up real and believable. And not to mention how positively visual your writing is to the reader. Can't wait to read the rest of what you have written.