All Comments on 'Lilith'

Excellence in words… and I love your Choice of Wines! Perfect pairing with the food!

I'm really not into BDSM, But this story just sucked you in. Excellent read, 5 stars. Looking forward to a sequel of what Toms adventure was, and where will he and L go from here.

A classic of the genre. Well put together with good balance making for an enjoyable read. A few too many word switch typos, and multiple repetitions of Le femme sauvage were difficult to accept. If you use another language, please check it - no French speaker can read that without stopping at what appears to be a masculine woman. La Femme Sauvage next time please.

Anonymous, thank you for your helpful suggestions. I have corrected my bad French and caught some other typos as well. The new version of the story should be posted in the next couple of days. Thank you!

Ok I'm only two pages in and annoyed that what could be a great story is marred by just ignoring minor details like the 'disappearing' zip ties and the fact that Tom only has two hands while driving. If you gave this a rewrite it would be an easy five star

Hank's death was regrettable, all things considered; no one could mourn Shorty for all his faults but Hank seemed the odd man out.

There were quite a number of editing misses in terms of misspelled words; barker where it should have been barked* being a later example, but there were a lot of these instances throughout.

While there were bits and pieces dropped in to foreshadow the captives being able to get a message to the outside and Jeff noted the gun having been moved unbeknownst to L, the raid felt very hurried and the combination of George not having been restrained/searched and the tactical officers (we'd be talking an FBI Hostage Rescue Team operation or a U.S. Marshalls task force raid considering they're after escaped convicts) not still having their weapons at the ready when a suspect is still at large resulting in the delay that resulted in Hank being killed, Jeff being wounded and L nearly being killed seemed thoughtless. Contrivances are perfectly fine to start a story (every story needs an inciting incident), but when they come up later on in order to provide a pay-off of some sort, they become less excusable.

Amazing? No. Bad? Of course not. It's on the upper side of good and, as such, gets 4/5 from me.

Not sad about shorty…but Hank…dang! I liked him and Tom. Curious about the 2 hitmen hired by rich clients. Were they Shorty n Hank? Otherwise, great story🎉🎉. This was truly a story and I couldn’t read it fast enough…..loved it🌹⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

A magnum opus for sure. Thoughtfully plotted and tight writing too. Kudos!

Easily the best story I’ve ever read. Well done.

The story of O is a real book in real life and it has a movie WHOA I so did not know that but honestly this was wayyyy better then that story in my option. I all most want to read a story about what happen with her son's slave Annie. I like the color theme of red for L maybe she wanted to go for a demonic crimson style.