All Comments on 'Little and Mom'

She took his pants down. Then She took them down a second time. Hmmm. How many pairs of pants was he wearing???

Ok he was 5'5 and his mother as you wrote was a good bit shorter than him at 5'10. That was on the second paragraph and that is where i stopped. Thank god i didnt waste anymore time reading it.

You really, really need an editor to reach your fullest. I tried to read but there were just too many detracting errors.

He was 5'5. She was "quite a bit shorter" at 5'10?

"Her mother had a boyfriend"

Multiple pants removal

Editor and you would really improve

shawn standing barely 5 feet 5 inches tall -- or short. and then Jess was a good bit shorter than her son, almost 5''10', tall for a woman. keep things straight in your story or you will lose your readers very quickly you really need an editor or at least re read your story before you post it

too many error. review your work. how is 5' 10" shorter than 5' 5"?

Jess was 5"10'????

Thanks everybody for the feedback. I changed a few things now and think the edited version is much better. Sorry this version had so many errors, but I rewrote the story about a dozen times for the Lit guidelines and I forgot to edit out a few things from the older versions. New version incoming though.

Another wimpy son with dom mother story.

Could just imagine where things could go in the days that followed