All Comments on 'Little Sister's Best Friend'

Like a story I just submitted, it feels a bit constrained by the 750 word format. Do go on and publish a longer version.

I too hope that you write an expanded version.

I hope to see these characters and this story expanded

And gentle, nice first time and looks like ready to repeat often.

For a short story right too the point, I liked it and hope you expand on it. I see trouble on the horizon, two first timers and no mention of birth control. Been there

That was sweet and offers a lot of possibilities for an expanded story. Nice job!

Anna let out a little moan. Adam held Anna by the hips

Adam was on the edge when Anna moaned

Adam came deep inside of Anna. Adam wrapped his arms around Anna and.....

Adam Anna Adam Anna....

Try his or he, her, she.

There’s two people, it’s not to hard to remember which is which, and almost confusing with such similar names.

Try to stop repeating them over and over...

Sexy and sensual. Reading helped me pleasantly pass a few minutes. More plz.

The beginning of the story felt like there was a backstory to those two hanging out in the past. It’d be interesting if you gave some flashbacks of some of their sweetest memories together which led to this point :D

Short and sweet.

Thanks for sharing!

Hi, enjoyed this and I feel you could flesh it out into an excellent story or series, 4 stars for me

This would make a great series.

I know they are restrained in the living room while his sister sleeps in another room. But could Anna maybe remove his shirt so that her breasts can caress Adam's chest -- and maybe he has the dusting of chest hair that is a sexy turn on for her breasts? Maybe their second time can be more involved.

It was a short and enjoyable but too fast. It has a couple of possibilities for directions to go in for further chapters.

Fantastic! Sexy and sweet, even for such a short story. Nice work!

WOW

Great short story.

You’re getting very good at this author thing.

5 stars!

Bill S.

I particularly enjoy stories that use only the necessary words to get the message across. The most common objection that I have with many Literotica writers is that they just use words as unnecessary dunnage, to fill up pages.

very good. I would like to see you work a longer version as well.

I liked it, short and to the point.

Very good writing of a story without a lot of extra words. Do a longer version.

It's a cute little story that gets both parties virgins an orgasm. Obviously, you don't plan to take this any further. It's been 4 years.

Very nice, but I would like more description of the penetration and how it felt by both virgins.