by odgreen
This is a great start for your first story. I can't wait for more. And if you get negative feedback about the story or you being sexist and/or racist, ignore it. I'm a black professor and mother and I love it!
As I say, it's hard to believe.... that this is your first story. It is written very well, painting very clear images of what you want us to see. I can't wait for more chapters as a new pet is introduced to a world she probably never knew existed.
5 stars.
fantastic start to your writing please carry on as i really enjoyed the theme and your imagery x
Thank you all for your kind comments! I've received wonderful email feedback as well. Stay tuned for Part 2 (just submitted). It gets jucier, and I hope you do too. ;)
You can humiliate and degrade without such terms as "nigger."
Domination is one thing, but racism is completely another.
That being said I won't read further.
You wanted a fetish type story where the women are back to being barefoot and pregnant, almost a Gorean fictional lifestyle, where their only thoughts are to serve the men. Race (color) did not have to come into the mix.