All Comments on 'Liz'

He didn't hear the shot that entered his right eye but he did feel the one that seconds before tore his pecker and his balls to shreads

write this kind of 'story'.

What a waste of effort, time, bandwidth, space.

Hey, I didn't know the story was so badly written. I love this section and when I see a new one published I plunge right in only to find the story was so disappointing.

So, I read the first few paragraph and that was sufficient enough for me to come a conclusion and to make my comment.

Suggestion: Try reading up some of those stories with at least and 'H' before you try your hand in this category. Better still, let me recommend you 'Wrath of a Writer' by

Green_Gem. You might learn a thing or two on how to ACTUALLY write one.

Don't say I didn't give you and sound comment...

I would have liked the noconsent/hesitance from Katie to last longer and give way more slowly.